Going Down

Crockpot
Author: Crockpot
Word Count: 77
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silhouette hovers
in shadows of moonlight;
lover’s voice comes

clothes cautiously,
carefully,
slip softly

fan blows,
breeze bites at my skin,
waves of sheet suck me under

my arms stretch down,
reaching to pull him close,
his fingers enter

twine with mine,
warm lips
come down on me

breathy whiskers and
warm whispers pet my skin
(goose-bumped from the wind)

barely touching mouth,
soft, smooth, gently probing me
to move—I moan for more, him

Going Down

©1995

  • pinkyjain

    pinkyjain, 9 months ago

    Oooooh, so very erotic, & beautiful. You should put these in a book with yours & Mike’s artwork & publish them

  • Crockpot

    Crockpot in reply to pinkyjain’s comment, 9 months ago

    Ya know, there was a time we talked about doing that, but most of Mike’s artwork isn’t really appropriate. Plus I just don’t think my stuff is that good. But thanks!! :)

  • LocoCow

    LocoCow, 9 months ago

    Very sensual pice down to the barely touching mouths…

  • Damian

    Damian, 9 months ago

    Yeah, I’m with pinky. I’ve been enjoying your writing; you’re too hard on yourself :)

  • Crockpot

    Crockpot in reply to Damian’s comment, 9 months ago

    Well thanks Damian – I really do appreciate you taking the time to read it and comment… it’s just been a really, really long time since I’ve written anything halfway decent at all and so much of this stuff I look back on now and wonder if it’s too cliché or pretentious. LOL – but I suppose every writer goes through that at some point! ;)

  • Shannon Rene' Justice

    Shannon Rene' ..., 9 months ago

    awesome work…now only if most guys could actually do that shit right, we’d be in business ;)

  • Crockpot

    Crockpot in reply to Shannon Rene' Justice’s comment, 9 months ago

    Do what shit right?? Sex? We got that shit down to a tee, baby girl…

    ;)

  • Shannon Rene' Justice

    Shannon Rene' ..., 9 months ago

    lol, im sure you do dear, im sure you do

  • Thomas Josiah Chappelle

    Thomas Josiah ..., 8 months ago

    Cherish is the word that describes a vibrant and sensuous relationship.Start well…finish superb

  • Crockpot

    Crockpot in reply to Thomas Josiah Chappelle’s comment, 8 months ago

    Wow – thanks Tommy!! That’s an awesome compliment…!

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