Elegy
This is a poem I wrote for class back in college. It’s about an ongoing love/hate relationship I had for several years with a guy I was terribly in love/hate with. I gave him a copy of this and he loved it.
© 1995
Tomorrow, when you die, I
won’t be there.
Instead I’ll be wearing
your shaved off hair
in a murky bar
downtown somewhere;
and as I galavant around,
the people will stare
At me! At me!
and at the
bubblegum
in our hair…
and it will be fun
to paint my face red
in the shape of
a heart undone
and I’ll drink lots of beer,
I’ll wear socks that are blue,
and as the crowd looks on
they’ll really be watching you…
HA! But of course, my friend!
(That’s just what they do!)
Maybe I’ll black out my teeth
and walk hunkered like a troll;
or just talk kind of funny
and tell them I’m really old—
Alas, I won’t care: I’ll have
your pockethole of soul.
pinkyjain
Love this, this is awesome. i’m assuming you wrote this Lorie. Its great. So cool he loved it, too, :O))))). Brilliant writing. Do you still write
Crockpot replied
Ya know, I don’t write often at all anymore. I started writing poetry when I was about 12 and got my first poem published when I was 14. I wrote all through high school and college, and also well into my 20’s. When I got married the first time, though, I kinda stopped. Occasionally I still write stuff but none of it is nearly as good as the stuff I wrote when I was suicidal. (Ironic, isn’t it
?)
Crockpot replied
Oh – but yea, it’s me. LOL! Glad you like it!
pinkyjain
i think a lot of writers write their best stuff when they are going thru emotional turmoil, & it sort of makes sense, who wants to read mundane, they want adventure, drama, & so on. i wrote more poetry back in my late 20’s, rarely now
LocoCow
Nicely written
Damian
Really nice Lorie! A shame the crativity can’t come at the same level when there’s only happiness, LOL! I enjoyed the directed randomness of this.
Crockpot replied
Thanks! And it’s so true. I can honestly say I have never wondered why all the ‘greats’ were so miserable. All my faves (Poe, Plath, Dickenson, etc.) had such major problems!
Damian
LOL, so true! I’ve read Poe and loved my book of Dickenson poems so much I wore it out and don’t have any anymore LOL! I shouldn’t admit, but I don’t think I’ve read any Plath – heathen that I am.
Crockpot replied
Egads! No Plath?? Noooooo!!! Say it isn’t so! You must get your hands on some. Even if it means I have to bubblemail you passages! LOL! I have several of her collected poems and a beat up copy of The Bell Jar that I’ve read who knows how many times. Just let me know!! :D
Damian
:)
Okay, please! I’ll take you up on the offer of some bubblemailed passages! You seem so damn enthusiastic, she must be good!