Treads Forlorn (part 1 in a series of 3)

This corridor is empty but for
The tears and footpaths of others;
I walk it knowing it’s been tread before,
But still I clutch my cloak for cover.
My countenance to all is
Beseemingly obvious in sadness,
(For feeling something amiss)
As my eyes watch my feet with dreadness.

When Love is explored yet not
Answered in kind, one is alone;
Weariness of some kind of drought
Forces the question of if her heart’s sown
With the same seeds as mine,
If the fruit which it grows
Seems so different in kind.
I must remember that we are of two separate minds.

This corridor is straight—I wonder what lies below.


Corydon

Treads Forlorn (part 1 in a series of 3) by

Feel free to critique.

As the link implies, this is part one of what could be considered a sort of trilogy.

It was more or less a trilogy after the fact, though. I do not believe I intended it to be at the beginning.

I suppose the subtle word play and incorrect endings could either be chalked up to too much Lewis Carrol at the time, though I am not certain of that. Perhaps the theme of exploration is also partly from that.

It should be noted that this poem (as well as the other two—perhaps especially the other two) are heavily influence by Vergil’s second Eclogue.

Link to the second poem, The Forest of Love

Link to the untitled third poem

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  • akasmiley91
    akasmiley91almost 3 years ago

    AMAZING! thats all I can say!!!

  • Thank you. I really appreciate you reading my works.

    – Corydon