I Just Want Her...
A piece that I wrote because I haven’t been able to see, feel, smell, taste or sense my girl lately…..I mean my woman …for she is my woman and not my girl…lol…but I just been missing that physical connection with her….. and the ending was taken from the lovely written piece by Jacqleen NO
Very nice read ….if I liked it you should like it….smilez
but I hope you enjoy ….sincerely daz
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When your pockets
Are like the ground you walk on
And the ground you walk on
Is just …..dirt poor
You in love
But you can’t provide your love
The love
She so deserves
At times you wish you could
Take the heart that bleeds for them
And squeeze it dry to the last drop
To show the love you have for them is nonstop
Because that last drop
Is never coming
For your heart is filled with a undying love
That pulsates as long as the two of you
Are in each other company
You
are Aladdin
The street urchin
And she
Jasmine
The princess
You try your hardest to keep that smile up
That you have magically placed up her face
And for them lips not to fall heavy into a frown
Because the weight of a frown
Can bring the strongest of us down
Living off paycheck to paycheck
Working to have funds
So you and her can have fun
or simply getaway and run
But you sacrifice your hours and your days
To slave just to see a payday
That you have no days
To pay her any time like them ol days
Working over time
She getting no time
You clocking in
And everytime you clock in
You hope that she doesn’t clock out
Walk out
Because you never clocked in
Never worked over time
Gave her enough time
Because you gave all your time
Trying to buy time
Some moments
Some minutes
To boost the mobile
And ring up a day that you wish will never end
And just like you
I am that guy
I try so hard to be Mr. Right
That sometimes I lose sight
Of who I am
So when I look in the mirror
I got to double check
Make sure I’m the dude looking in the mirror
And not the dude looking out the mirror
Cuz sometimes I lose my image
To the man in the mirror
I should be the one looking in
Not the one looking out
Trying to recollect myself
I want this love thing to work out
I’m trying to mold something
But maybe ....I’m molding….nothing
Just….a waste of time
Or maybe I’m molding time
I don’t know anymore
I just want…her
I want to provide for her
I don’t want to think
That this might be the day
That I don’t have her
She stays in my mind
But never in my arms
She fills my heart
But yet I feel so empty
I just want her
Feeling so cold
She the blanket for my soul to hold
But she isn’t here
And I just want her
Nothing less….nothing more
poeticgenius
damn CB u out here head first it’s all gud though u told the story of so many people lives just now one love
colorblind replied
glad you like it
lol you know you are one of a few that i truly like to hear the truth of my work
thumbs up PG$ you already know i’m coming legit
wingsoffire
Daz, you always stike a nerve with your power pen good friend, relationships are tough and sometimes you find yourself slipping and fading away out of the heart of someone you love, it has to be felt and kept close and no matter how much we struggle to keep them near they get further and further away. If love is real it will sustain and come back to you, I hope it does for you good man cause your heart and soul is just so beautiful. The reality of this piece breaks my heart.
colorblind replied
Thank you for your comment …it always flaps a warming wing of fire to light up my day…smilez ….you are so wonderful to me and my work and i love that so much ..thank you so much for being there for me …. truly…and sincerely
i was suppose to see her today …but being that i have no mode of transportation i was ass out …in on my off day to….now i have to wait till my next off day… thank you for stopping by much love daz
JenniferB
True love will endure time and distance, a beautiful, heartfelt poem.
colorblind replied
THank you Jenny Its always a pleasure to have jenny from the block to stop by and give me some time from her busy clock ….smilez..thumbs up to you …and true words you have stated …thank you
Christie Moses
Oh this is so beautiful it hurts to read. What a deep pure love you feel for this lucky lady. I sincerely hope it lasts forever. A love like this should never have to die. That would be just a crime if it ever did.
Its a shame that no matter how much we pour our heart into someone, if they donot reciprocate then its holding vapors. May your love always be tangible..xoxo
colorblind replied
awwww thank you C-Moses ….its a delight for you to grace my piece with your lovely comment …i hope our love isnt just another gust in the wind…..but forever
thank you for reading it …truly – daz
jacqleen
OMG colorblind….............This is Soooooooo Honest and Heartfelt….and I could sooooooo RELATE to this piece ….it broke my heart to read this…....
THIS writing Really Really TOUCHED my heart….........wow! instant FAV…...and LOVED your Ending :)) lol xo
colorblind replied
Yea lets just the ending came from a good friend of mines that has loads of talent ….believe me …you should check her out ….fab work…..and i’m glad you read this new piece of mines…..i’m off to write more and off to explore …..lol…glad you really like it …truly ..it touches me …..
Shoaib .
damn man
this is truly your defining piece
straight from the gut with no crazy tangents that didnt fit
this was just all heart man
a winner for sure and i think one of your finest
great work bay bro
colorblind replied
yea big bro
i’m guessing you like this one lol
but thanks fa real…..truly glad that big bro likes this one
you already know what that means ….THIS IS A OFFICIAL PIECE ….thanks man truly
Rhenastarr
Straight forward, open,honest and so exquisitely real. I could feel your fear, your want, your need to give your love all that and more. It is a shame that for each of us, love sometimes just doesn’t seem like enough. I hope the lady in question realizes what a gem of heart she has. Blessings to you friend and best wishes. Beautiful love expressed so brilliantly.
colorblind replied
thank you Rhenastarr truly from the gem of my heart ….smilez
i’m glad you was able to read this and leave a wonderful comment as well
Also thank you for submitting wonderful work to RIck And I group Lifeline…we were glad to have it featured ..lovely work ….and thank you again
Trenchtownrock
You really know how to let your heart fly and sings with honesty..this is just fire from within breathing hard…I can feel the love..the desire to love even more and the pitfalls that standsa in the way..truly a bad ass write.
colorblind replied
thanks man you already know you always send a dart to the heart with the words man truly taken to the core ….thanks always a pleasure to have you visit ….thumbs up man
JaneSolomon
straight from the heart sweetheart. xx
colorblind replied
straight from there indeed ….xoxo….always and forever….smilez
lianne
This is pure, honest, and very real without exaggerated emotions – just so much love here along with the anguish of trying to make it in a world that often pulls you away from exactly what you love the most. And even though in our hearts we know that what we do we do for the one we love, that doesn’t fill that emptiness – in us or in them. I wish you the joy of this kind of love for all time – it seems to be the kind of love that runs that deep! Very moving writing.
colorblind replied
awwwww thank you lianne for this amazing comment it brings joy to this guy heart….i’m bout to go to work …and this truly will having me smiling from the time i clock in and clock out
thank you….thank you ....xoxoxo
ricardo perez jr
thats crazy ill
ricardo perez jr
oh i read it again ,dats dope metaphors
colorblind replied
crazy ill huh….lol….you know i have to go hard when its her that is the subject …i dont play when i’m writing bout her …see thats str8 str8 str8 from the heart and soul…..they scream these words lol
princessleah
Truly sincere writing Daz. I’m sure your woman will understand that you are trying your best to make ends meet. Money isn’t everything, it’s the time that you spent with each other that’s most important regardless of how little or how long that time may be. It sounds like she is one special lady, she’ll understand. Treat HER right and she will treat YOU right. Brilliant piece!!
colorblind replied
I’m so glad i read this …this morning….because it change my mindset about things
I truly want to make time to see her even if for 30mins or less….i want and need to see her
its been awhile now ….i truly think maybe she wants this to be over….i haven’t heard word from her over the phone …i’ve been texting no reply ….i’m just hoping that she has traded from my team to another’s team….i’m glad you like this truly ..brings joy and wonder to me thhis morning…smilez to ya …daz ….xoxo
ShadowDancer
i love the depth and honesty in this.. it’s so nice, as a woman, to hear the thoughts of a man that is trying to provide, working hard, and trying to keep the balance of making it and making the love happen… wonderful!
colorblind replied
thank you and to hear these wonders expel from you is wonderful…thank you …so much for your time and words….much love indeed …..wonderful…is you
deborah zaragoza
Colorblind This is so brutally honest… and moving many people to the idea to just be truthful to yourself. You are so wise at 20 years old and truly must be a very old soul. I can’t wait to read everything you have written. The world should see your work and I hope you are sending this to every venue available. I will be seeing you soon on television, I am sure. I am writing to all the local stations here in Texas to go look at your work. Thank you for your human intervention to the world. Deborah
colorblind replied
what lovely words…..i’m flush red right now…lol…what a comment to leave …just has me all bundled up in joy…..you really are!!! WHOA….thanks Deborah…...you truly brought me a smile …..sncerely daz
Johemia 15 days ago
‘your pockets
Are like the ground you walk on
And the ground you walk on
Is just …..dirt poor’
You have some great imagery and such a beautiful poet mind…the way you see and think about everyday things. Cool.