down with the Queen!
June 7, 2008
“Down with the Queen! Down with the monarchy!” kept repeating the crowd assembled in front of the palace. The Queen looked through the window horrified, an attempt had been made that morning at the parade grounds, after her speech calling for more repression a bomb had exploded; as a result, her left arm was now in a tourniquet.
The year was 1860; the people had demanded the creation of a Congress that now was controlled by the opposition, the Socialists. The colonial empire was crumbling in the Caribbean. That is where her advisers wanted her to hide, impossible! There, she will be hanged or decapitated. Then, she was told to hide at her secret summerhouse in the forest. Of course, there were no luxuries there, she will be living like one of the peasants, perhaps dressed like one, that way nobody would notice, no servants, only a handful of bodyguards. The decision was made: She would hide in the summerhouse, until the situation got better, if he did not she would leave the country; it was close to the border.
The next day, the secret partition in the library was opened and she went down the underground corridors with 5 bodyguards. Everyone was dressed in black so as not to been seen in the darkness with a few candles and supplies. Only knives were carried, well hidden, no guns. That night they arrived at the summerhouse, a few bombs were exploded and the corridor was sealed off, nobody could follow her thru them now, if they ever found them. There was a stable with 10 horses in the nearby barn, in case they had to flee; the border was only 3 miles away. She tried to make herself at home, wood had to be gathered during the day for the fireplace and the cooking, as well as enough water to be stored, and for daily usage. Now, to wait for news, but either way, she probably will never rule as an absolute Queen again! She would have to decline or share her power with Congress, at best. At worst, the Socialists would take over and she would have to flee the country!!
A nearby howl wakes her up out of her reverie!
Comments
Great to see your Queen story! A cool time to set it, back when they were more than figureheads.
Great story!
Scary to think what one had to deal with when only doing what you’d been raised to do your entire life, and that is all you know. What do you do if it should be all taken away? Interesting concept for your story. And it came from a dream? Wow.
Dark and dreary picturing her sneaking away like that. She seemed to humble to it though.
good setting, quite sad really when you see it from her point of view
Al though I enjoy the setting and the time period, it seemed to lack something.
Excluding the few grammatical errors, I think you just didn’t have enough room to clearly define the Queen.
I’d like to see it expanded. =]
hello
this was just a dream I had one night, I suppose it could be the first chapter of a historical fiction, but so far I have been working on other stories for other contests, I tried to make it the queen of any European country none in particular, in the past I had problems with publishers here in the usa, who do not want to publish anything controversial, some of my translations were not published for that reason, and so I did not publish them here either in redbubble, so as not to have enemies, although they are not my views since I am only the translator, not the original writer.
thanks for the compliment, as far as grammatical errors they are probably many, since English is my second language.
chord0
this is quite nice. i always want stories like this one to be longer.
sorry for all the grammatical errors in my last post, english is my 27th language.
hello
due to popular demand, I enter this story in 2 other websites for a review, so far they found minor errors dealing with verb tenses, which I now corrected. Oh yes, the queen’s personality, I did not intend from the beginning that she would have all that much personality, but since this story came from a dream, I guess the solution to that problem is very simple: I need to go back to sleep.
thanks again and good night
chord0