My Velociraptor could probably kill your Velociraptor. We'd know if they fought.

nothing there; from molded ball r o o ms
or busted taillights      or sweat soaked curls

nothing could encapsulate what once was our animating force

i forgot my mothers’ home,   
at 17
  Memories
of walking my stepfather’s staircase 
were gone,

filed into  :   Information Unnecessary
along with hypotheses and hyperboles and everything else not learned in the sun

                                You were my sun.
               play any way
              on words and I will feel
           the same.
                                You were my sun.

in the bed beneath the great oak tree (which they’ve cut down)
You left your horizon to lay with me
in manmade blankets on manmade pillows
bubbled over and reeking our manmade emotions.
nylon & crab grass & 10% cotton
stuck to my newest skin
and i set with the sun
Set&Settled
the guilt of the betrayed -
necromantic nuances
shot to hell by nearsightedness
- settled
in the ridges of the Appalachians

six months later
i beat you to death.


Chlobot

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  • ytsumner
    ytsumnerabout 3 years ago

    this is unique and powerful and I’m going to read it again and again
    (it also got me incredibly excited about writing, your stuff is great)

  • thankyou, that means a lot coming from another great writer.

    – Chlobot

  • aglaia b
    aglaia babout 3 years ago

    oh wow!
    great read. :-)

  • discomb
    discombabout 3 years ago

    lovely words…

  • parole
    paroleabout 3 years ago

    Excellent poem – love it

  • TheWanderingBoo
    TheWanderingBooalmost 3 years ago

    wow, simply stunning

  • David Okon
    David Okonalmost 3 years ago

    I really like your imagery. This was one of the few times I’ve been so immersed in a poem.

  • i’m glad that it grabbed you. Maybe you’ll find more poetry that you enjoy?

    – Chlobot

  • debteraI
    debteraIalmost 3 years ago

    excellent write sis…you danced over this like a ballaerina! well done.

  • linguistic ballet! heh. thanks much.

    – Chlobot

  • Illuminati
    Illuminatialmost 3 years ago

    A very great attention grabbing title. good job. your title makes my single word titles look like nothing. also, a vrey emotional poem depending what background you happen to be reding it from.

  • Cassey
    Casseyalmost 3 years ago

    Incredible writing. I’ve read it a few times and each reading brings something else. I bet if I read it while in a different head I’d find even more.

  • it’s nice to know that people still read poems more than once. it really is necessary, to catch all of the subtleties. thank you for the compliment :)

    – Chlobot

  • Selkie
    Selkiealmost 3 years ago

    Bloody fantastic and unique!

  • thank you. When I was 6 I carved a flat bottom boat & named it the Selkie. It’s still around somewhere…lurking in my mothers house.

    – Chlobot