My Velociraptor could probably kill your Velociraptor. We'd know if they fought.
My Velociraptor could probably kill your Velociraptor. We'd know if they fought. belongs to the following groups:
! Creative Writing & Poetry ! and Creative, Talented, and Unknownnothing there; from molded ball r o o ms
or busted taillights or sweat soaked curls
nothing could encapsulate what once was our animating force
i forgot my mothers’ home,
at 17
Memories
of walking my stepfather’s staircase
were gone,
filed into : Information Unnecessary
along with hypotheses and hyperboles and everything else not learned in the sun
You were my sun.
play any way
on words and I will feel
the same.
You were my sun.
in the bed beneath the great oak tree (which they’ve cut down)
You left your horizon to lay with me
in manmade blankets on manmade pillows
bubbled over and reeking our manmade emotions.
nylon & crab grass & 10% cotton
stuck to my newest skin
and i set with the sun
Set&Settled
the guilt of the betrayed
necromantic nuances
shot to hell by nearsightedness
in the ridges of the Appalachians
six months later
i beat you to death.
yt sumner
this is unique and powerful and I’m going to read it again and again
(it also got me incredibly excited about writing, your stuff is great)
Chlobot replied
thankyou, that means a lot coming from another great writer.
aglaia b
oh wow!
great read. :-)
discomb
lovely words…
parole
Excellent poem – love it
TheWanderingBoo
wow, simply stunning
ChaosZero
I really like your imagery. This was one of the few times I’ve been so immersed in a poem.
Chlobot replied
i’m glad that it grabbed you. Maybe you’ll find more poetry that you enjoy?
debteraI
excellent write sis…you danced over this like a ballaerina! well done.
Chlobot replied
linguistic ballet! heh. thanks much.
Illuminati
A very great attention grabbing title. good job. your title makes my single word titles look like nothing. also, a vrey emotional poem depending what background you happen to be reding it from.
Cassey
Incredible writing. I’ve read it a few times and each reading brings something else. I bet if I read it while in a different head I’d find even more.
Chlobot replied
it’s nice to know that people still read poems more than once. it really is necessary, to catch all of the subtleties. thank you for the compliment :)
Selkie
Bloody fantastic and unique!
Chlobot replied
thank you. When I was 6 I carved a flat bottom boat & named it the Selkie. It’s still around somewhere…lurking in my mothers house.
Ash180470
unexpected. i never knew which way it was going to go or sound or feel, but it was great. can i just say: those last lines were the bomb. Ax
Gary O'Toole
The title MADE me want to read this, and I’m thrilled I did- love it, thank you
MCCarruthers
Very potent mix of imagery and language. Nicely done.
wigs
wow such imagery….great read
nalezing
finally something written by a writer
i have read and read the pieces deposited here and
found the majority wishing they were left as individual letters
rather than having been clumsily pressed together
by the painfully unskilled patrons of this site
to list your obvious literary influences seems overtly pretentious
and so i will refrain from throwing names at you
you know how talented you are
if you write a dozen pieces like this in your life
then you may freely consider your breaths worthwhile
journey360
a unique style of writing and interesting story line
i really enjoyed reading this
Paintpeeler
Reason can only be heard by those understanding and willing to listen with tolerance abiding with thought and reasoning.
Adam Spence
Powerful imagery, really excellent writing!
Sourav
Very unique. Love the writing style.
oneperfectkiss
rivetting writing style and worldly truth in it too.
Raz Solo
You had me at velociraptor really. :D
Thomas Simunsen
Excellent, you painted a picture of love and serenity so well. A dreamy web of words, then an ending that wakes you up.
Maggie Garavaglia
This was an excellent read. I’m not particularily fond of the format, but it didn’t detour from your wonderful curve of thought either.
Much enjoyed :)
JayTeeAre
Not going to lie, the title is what dragged me in. I’m pretty happy with that, though, this was a fantastic piece.