The bright light finds it’s opening through the clouds, shooting through enough glare to make my eye’s squint. I raise my hand to salute the sun while stretching my head forward to gain more clarity.
Something glistens in the distant haze.
There is no one around me, just me and my dream. There is emptiness in sound, and I begin to glide. Gliding gently forward, the vision becomes clearer.
A treasure chest of jewels becomes brighter than the sun’s attempt, and more pleasing to the eye. The chest is full of sparkling gemstones in every beautiful colour imaginable, the colours broken by drizzles of gold chains.
This is not all.
I look just beyond the chest and there stands a table laden in bountiful glory. A giant size bowl sits in the middle, boasting exotic and delicious fruits, pink and yellow cream cakes sit waiting on two tier silver platers. Lemonade fizzes from rainbow coloured goblets.
An arm comes from behind and wraps itself around my tiny shoulder. Unafraid, I sink into the lady’s ample bossom. She strokes my hair and says ‘It’s okay honey child, everything is going to be okay.’ She places warm fluffy slippers on my feet.
My anxiety and fear are gone and I bask, in all that is wonderful and all that is mine.
Then all of a sudden an unwelcome splash of warm water hits my chest. The water runs down my shoulders into the bottom of my hair and soaks my sheet.
Begrudgingly, I get up and gather my sister in my arms. I change her, then myself into some dry clothes. I throw a dry towel on the wet spots and tuck my sister back into bed.
Laying back in mine, I desperately try, unsuccessfully, to go back to my dream.
Silently I curse, I hate sleeping in the bottom bunk.
LisaG
My word this is so good, I’ve goosebumps….I can only imagine how you wanted to return to such a wonderful dream.
How tender and loving you were to take care of your sister…...
Anne van Alkemade
LOL. What an absolutely beautiful vision, what a rude awakening. The descriptions here are so beautiful and ditto to Lisa’s comments.
Anne van Alkemade
Oh, and why oh why is this not in the Flash Fiction queue!!!!
Chanel2 replied
I thought flash fiction had to be under 150 words? Off to read the guidelines now, thank you Anne.
Wendy Slee
well written, it reminded me of meditations….....alas, the ending reminded me of how real life does tend to bring us crashing back to reality…
You have described it well, and bravo for caring for your sister too ;-)
Yasemin Sumner
This broke my heart… I’m not sure if it was supposed to. But it seemed so sad that her dreams were the only place she could be looked after instead of the other way around…
niggle
very good, you sure do have a way with words :-)
Anne van Alkemade
Apologies Chanel. It does have that word limit. I didn’t realise this piece is longer. It didn’t seem it when I read it!!!
Chanel2
Thanks for all your comments. I should say that when I started writing this I was going for a poem and it turned to a story. I was aiming for the humour, as in life things that are sad can have a funny element.
But I think when I started writing the dream, I got lost in it (whoops, LOL), guess that’s what happens.
deliriousgirl
Beautiful imagery, I was there with you in the dream. And the rude awakening!
deliriousgirl
And it’s extremely difficult to hit that 150 word limit, ain’t it? I can edit and edit for hours and still have too many words.
Chanel2 replied
Thanks deliriousgirl :)
Yes it is a challenge, sometimes it’s not worth going for the 150 words if you loose the heart of the story in the process.
olawunmi
Well written, if only we did not have to wake up from dreams such as these, but then again reality can so much more rewarding even when it means getting pee to bring back to it! :)
Chanel2 replied
Hehe, Yes indeed Summayyah, they wouldn’t be dreams if we didn’t have reality. Thanks for reading :)