Ode to my Dentist
Inspired by a visit to my dentist who I suspect of overcharging. Republished in written work from an early journal entry.
My teeth are shining
x-rays reveal root of all
bank balance decay
Ode to my Dentist
Inspired by a visit to my dentist who I suspect of overcharging. Republished in written work from an early journal entry.
My teeth are shining
x-rays reveal root of all
bank balance decay
Andy Buclaw
Yeah, I agree! those bastards!
nagela
to true.
love this. Love your work. Thanks for your comment about Ships.
davoid
Quite witty. ‘The root of all evil is money’ is the saying isn’t it.
I like the way the last line is kind of an answer and a statement, it feels like a song lyric to me.
I found your description notes amusing…
Celia Coulter replied
Thanks, Davoid. I had that “root of all evil” saying in mind when this haiku occured to me.
I also try to make the last line of my haiku something that changes the meaning of the lines before, making you re-evaluate what you have just read. Not everyone seems to notice what I am aiming for though!
davoid
Oh, I didn’t realise it was a haiku. Sticking to the 5/7/5 syllables makes it a challenge.
If people aren’t realising, it could be you are not obvious, which is a good thing.