The Sun
when i looked outside my window i saw the fense light up from sunlight and this just came to me!!!
The Sun belongs to the following groups:
1620, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Live, Love, Dream: , Melbourne & Victoria, Up & Coming Writers and WMGGolden rays of sunlight shining down to earth
The start of all rainbows, light, heat, and rain
Pokes up beyond the horizon and hovers over the sky
Playing Peek-a-boo with the world, hiding behind clouds
Moving higher and higher, getting smaller and smaller
“Ta-Da!” it reached its goal being on top of the world
It becomes tired, getting lower and lower
Coming down from its perch
Meets the horizon again and sinks down to sleep
Resting up for a new day
saleire
A lovely lovely image…...well done :o)
adgray
You will forgive me for letting people know your life long attraction with that game of peek-a-boo – hence your nick name ever since we saw you playing in on the ultrasound video! your hand rising up and down in front of your face!
Your imagery is clear and simple and your rhythm & rhyming is great also
Well done!
love you first! mummmmmmieeeeeeee! xoxoxoxoxox
bjboo replied
Mother, i do not mind if you tell the world (the people that read this) but you should n\know that i have always loved you first no matter what. the argument was well over before. but thankyou!
indeterminacy
I thought this was really nice – there’s an elegance to the simplicity. It’s almost mythological. Well done!
adgray
Now daughter everyone knows that you cannot have an egg without a chicken so I love you first!
End of story!
bjboo replied
mother, the egg loves the chicken when it is being developed. otherwise the egg would have decided to become bad and die
so i love you first!
(now it’s the end of story!)
Snoboardnlife
Very good! I started writing when I was a year younger than you… Looking forward to seeing what you write when you’re my age!
KEITH R. WILL...
this is very nice i love it