Your Silence Today is a Pond where Drowned things Live
The title comes from the pen of Adrienne Rich
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! Creative Writing & Poetry !, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Anger Management, Art & Dis(ease), Core [C.O.R.E], Creative, Talented, and Unknown, The Art of Pain, The beauty of poetry and Up & Coming WritersIn the shallow reefs
Are hard coral edges
Sharp with the white foam
That dances
With a cruelty to topple
Your toes walk around the edges
Blood drips
With each cut
The salt water comes to heal
Each wound
The black dog’s tail
Wobbles around in the air
Stopping to bark with a stick
Between his teeth
Looking into the pools
Small fish, clumps of seaweed
Cling to the sides of the crumbled rock
The air is thin
And hot yellow against your skin
The sun a season away from Silence
Today, the Ponds offer treasures
Of lime green sea-horses skeletons
Brittle beige coiled shells
Once the host
Of now Drowned things
Your Silence, today
Lives in competition
With the big blasts of jet
Powered bullets
Fired from your eyes into mine.
H M Bascom
Vivid imagery!
Genevieve Robey
A really great powerful piece. And yes, vivid imagery … which works brilliantly.
Lisa Jewell
Oh Red,
this poem had tears rolling down my cheek….
sublime imagery.
haunting
Oh wow xxx
BiographyofRed8 replied
thank you.. tears were what started this piece
linaji
I love Adrienne Rich.. and have seen her at least 10 times and have met her breifly once.. you do her a great honor.. she is queen and you are not far off.. exquisite work and you always have me going back a million times to find where I feel best.. it is just that you run miles ahead of me.. and even my feelings are tripping.. but sublime none the less..xoxoxoxox
sexy ending.
BiographyofRed8 replied
omg omg omg!!!!!!!! you met her. dies she is probably
my all time favourite poet. I would probably kneel at her feet
with my arms out stretched saying “I am not worthy” hehehehe
Mikyle
Insane imagery!!! Awesome poem Red. x
BiographyofRed8 replied
thank you
ArcadiaTempest
There is quiet creeping into each stanza of the sorrow, bittersweet that builds up in layers with the visual in this ‘delicately’ powerful piece…..I am hoping you will understand my ambiguous description. I was so there reading this….distinctively evocative piece! X
BiographyofRed8 replied
yes i really get it.. and thank you so much for the insightful comment
Nascha
Stunning piece Red. I had that feeling one gets when they have lost something important or precious in life and yet the ending changed that feeling. xx
BiographyofRed8 replied
oh wow.. thank you!
Erika .
“the Ponds offer treasures
Of lime green sea-horses skeletons
Brittle beige coiled shells
Once the host
Of now Drowned things”...this just gripped my heart….
Leda D
wow this is just stunning,
BiographyofRed8 replied
thanks! =D
Emmahleee
This is incredible..
it gripped and wrenched my heart
CLiPiCs
Congratulations Inspired Artist
BiographyofRed8 replied
oh wow!!!!!!! thank you so much!!!!! im so honoured
hsien-ku
these words: The sun a season away from Silence
made my heart stop completely for a second or two. so much sorrow and resignation in those words. achingly beautiful in its sadness, your poem is almost a silence in itself.
BiographyofRed8 replied
thank you.. what a beautiful comment
IntriCate
Oh wow, how you bring back memories of a less than functional relationship from a time past. Vividly and beautifully written!