there's charcoal on her dress

bellmusker
Author: bellmusker
Word Count: 963
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there's charcoal on her dress

Because we shouldn’t ever have to grow out of Choose Your Own Adventure books.

And because Paris makes me thirsty.

there's charcoal on her dress belongs to the following groups:

Blue Room, Melbourne & Victoria, Short stories - Spherical Scriptings, The Sensual Word, Travel and Adventure and WMG

A woman is gazing down at Paris. She’s wended her way up the steps of Montmartre to view charcoal being smeared across paper, to watch the artists high on the hill. She’s sitting in front of the Basilica de Sacre Coeur, its creamy dome outlined against the late afternoon sky, one woman amongst the pairs of lovers lining the stairs. She knows the glow of travelling alone, but watching a slender hand stroke a curve of back, the pang in her chest startles her. She thinks perhaps to drown the pang in Viognier, and looks over her shoulder at the restaurants lining the square. The iron curlicues of the gate to the church catch her eye, and she can see the flicker of candles making shadows dance within. The door to the church gapes open, and the cosy darkness within tempts her as much as the rosy light of the sunset from the steps.

If she stands up and enters the church, go to 2.
If she stays to watch the sunset, go to 3.

2

The church soothes with its cool darkness, and she stands beside the nave in silence. Light tumbles through the ruby stained glass and falls at her feet, and suddenly she remembers the last time she stood here. Seventeen and fraying at the edges, she’d lit a creamy candle and willed the flame to banish the shadows that had followed her halfway around the world. Nostalgia is not a comfortable travel companion, and she’s grateful when her hunger kicks a hole in her sentimentality. A restaurant beckons, but her mood has made the hotel room suddenly appealing, and she could almost believe that the goat’s cheese and wine in the mini fridge is a typical French meal, to be enjoyed on her balcony.

If she goes out to dinner, go to 4.
If she returns to the hotel for goat’s cheese and wine, go to 5.

3
The late afternoon sunlight is beautiful as it spills across the steps, and when someone pulls out a guitar she doesn’t even flinch at the cliché of it all. She feels golden and gorgeous, and very slightly damned. A man is watching her and she feels him staring at her throat before she sees him, before she notices his unshaven whiskers and knowing eyes. She practises the French in her head and wonders if she’s brave enough to use it. French men alarm her somewhat with their brazen gazes and seductive words, but when you’re travelling, the rulebook stays at home.

If she speaks to him, go to 6.
If she doesn’t, go to 4.

4
Her hunger climbs over the other emotions, and begins rising up her throat to make itself known. She walks past the church and turns right along Rue Saint-Ėleuthėre, her kitten heels clicking on cobblestones until she come to the Place du Tertre. She takes a corner table and orders a wine she doesn’t recognise in an accent that makes her blush, but the golden liquid looks glorious in the twilight and she almost laughs out loud. She eats succulent mussels in a broth thick with herbs and downs her wine in greedy gulps, the bliss of dining alone making her eyes radiant and her food divine. She holds the fork in her left hand and reaches for her scarlet moleskin with the other. She needs this spilled in ink; her night at the very top of Paris, with only the light and her pen for company, and not a word to be said. THE END.

5
Dusk is falling and her shoes don’t take the steep descent well. She stumbles, and the men lining the steps rush forward with outstretched hands that land on parts of her that don’t need help. By the time she reaches Boulevard Rochechouart she needs alcohol more than ink, and a bottle of warm rose is bought before she realises she has no corkscrew. The back stairs of the Avenir Hotel take her away from the concierge and his loaded “Tout seule, madame?” and when she reaches her room, she knows she won’t leave it again that night. The breeze on the balcony blows her dress up, and as she props her bare feet on the railing she tucks the swathes of black cotton under her thighs and pushes the cork into the wine bottle with trembling hands. Her last night in Paris and she’s retreated to her balcony, again, where her French won’t be practised and her heart won’t be filled, and the dark blanket of travelling alone has already begun to wrap itself around her shoulders. She places the bottle against her lips, and opens them. Somehow, a glass seems unnecessary. THE END.

6
He has eyes the colour of his cap and she knows this isn’t accidental. She smiles and at her “Ca va?”, he smiles too, and pounces. He wants to draw her, wants her curves in his sketchbook, her cheekbones poured from his ink. She knows this line must have worked, this step must have delivered far more willing women into his web, but what she doesn’t know is that when she teasingly notes he has no sketchbook, he will take her by the arm and pull her to her feet, closer to the twilight of Paris. “Que faites-vous?” she stammers, what are you doing, and he actually looks annoyed at her fire. “My sketchbook is in my apartment, we’re going now.” The French is no longer so sexy, and the night no longer so impervious; her hotel beckons. And as the language of seduction climbs into the back seat and nestles down, her heels click her away from his purred vowels and knowing eyes. Go to 5.

  • BiographyofRed8

    BiographyofRed8

    omg, I used to love those books as a kid! And with this you have written a very clever wonderful portrait of both adventure, humor and paris..”what are you doing, and he actually looks annoyed at her fire” wonderful line well done!

  • bellmusker replied

    I used to love them too, hehe. Although I was extremely curious and used to go back and try to follow all the story lines….always hated the thought of missing out! Thanks so much :-)

  • LittleHelen

    LittleHelen

    Oh bloody hell…sooo sexy mon ami…I didn’t go into the Church, nor did I speak to the french man :| I may another time :)

    Magnifique xx

  • bellmusker replied

    Merci cherie :-) And you took the best route through the story, sweetheart…but of course you did. x x x
    ps see you in a few days!

  • Leith O'Malley

    Leith O'Malley

    You obviously know all the best stories involve charcoal on dresses ;)
    Enjoyed every twist, every turn.. every minute here… great writing.

    A long day, I needed to go to Paris tonight.. thanks B!
    You are the bell tower :)

  • bellmusker replied

    You are the bell tower :)
    And you, my friend, are a breath of fresh air!

    I think we all need to go to Paris tonight….sigh.

  • anya

    anya

    Me being the greedy one I am, read every single one from top to bottom. I used to the same with the ‘Choose your own adverture’. It is now clear to me why they never made sense.

  • Holly Ringland

    Holly Ringland

    sweet jesus woman. i have just devoured this slice of creamy Paris in one great big slurp without a glass. bell my love, if i could favourite this multiple times i would. what a roller coaster, my belly is doing flip flops… harsh, tender, frightening and alluring, this is a feast. i loved choose-your-own-adventure stories when i was girl… and to read an adventure to suit my adult mind was sheer bliss. when you mentioned this story this afternoon, i believe my toes actually curled with pleasure and anticipation and you, my girl of bells, have delivered… as you do. after penning my journal entry about parisian art and words this afternoon and then reading this tonight… well, you’ve been the cherry on top. bliss. thank you, thank you, thank you….x

  • Astoreth

    Astoreth

    fascinating x

  • bellmusker replied

    Thank you kindly :-)

  • crowe

    crowe

    Imaginitive, enticing, achingly french. Wonderful.

  • bellmusker replied

    Achingly French…this made my smile widen considerably!

  • hilde

    hilde

    and pushes the cork into the wine bottle with trembling hands

    Hahahahahaha! Well, we know where she learnt that, now don’t we?

  • bellmusker replied

    Ah lief, only the classiest wenches push the cork in, hehe. I learned it from a Dutch master of the art! x x x

  • Rebekah  Anderson

    Rebekah Anderson

    LOVE THIS! SO much better than any choose you own adventure book I’ve read! I especially liked 5. I think that was a small and stunningly written story of its own. The imagery and language composition are great!

  • bellmusker replied

    Cheers Rebekah! I thoroughly enjoyed weaving all these strands together, though it took quite a few re-writes to follow them all through. I would LOVE to find a choose your own adventure book in a secondhand book store. Nostalgia might not be a comfortable travel companion, but it sure aids writing :-)

  • crowe

    crowe

    Hey Bell, would you consider posting the story in the “Paris Group”?? Writing is pretty scarce over there.

  • Naomi Downie

    Naomi Downie

    love chose your own adventure…my fav story was the church—> going out for dinner thread. those mussels went happily down my throat as well mmm

  • Luckyvegetable

    Luckyvegetable

    I was waiting for the pit of snakes and the ancient Mayan artifacts =)

    I loved this, Bell. I even want to write one myself now!

    xo

  • nadine henley

    nadine henley

    I just dropped in for my evening fix and you didn’t disappoint! Usually I’m much too laziy to enjoy something like this – but it was delightful – and especially as I was able to retrace my/her steps and get a happy ending instead.

  • bellmusker replied

    If only we could do that in real life, hey? Actually, I’ve been to Paris a few times and have in fact retraced my steps up on the top of Montmartre, just in a woman’s shoes this time. And it was sublime.

    I’m so glad you found this piece, for I just this moment flicked it back down the pile and replaced it with something else; I often do that, just to freshen my page somewhat. Hope you enjoy its replacements! And thanks again for stopping by; I can’t tell you how much I enjoy your comments, Nadine :-)

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