Whole

Author: Lys •
Word Count: 654
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oh!
sorry if I woke you

she says upon discovery of the slumbering silver psyche

yaaaawn
...hey…
what’s a pretty little thing like you
doing way down here?

I have a hole

a hole?

a hole

may I see?

right here

she points to her chest

doesn’t that hurt?

a little

come here
let me look at you

she tiptoes towards him tacitly

darling, you’re bleeding!

yeah, it’s been doing that for a while now
all of my clothes are ruined

he reviews her jagged curves

oh
I thought you were dressed in red
you wear it too well

glassy drops drip over her painted body
weaving glossy trails of existence
mingling with the sticky diluted colour
warm and painted wet

who did this to you?

I did

she shuffles her feet
eyes fall to the floor

dearest, who did this to you?

he moistens a cloud white cloth
as he directs her to the washroom

I did

why would you do such a thing
to yourself?

he begins drawing an ivory bath
with water so clear and sparkling

I wanted to see

see what?

if I could feel

she scratches a fingernail into her arm
revealing a sliver of her milky ghost

do you mind?

he extends his arm
mildly enveloping her dripping hand in his
a last wave of emotion rolls over her
while she steps gingerly into the tub

let’s see what we can do

he smiles with his eyes
winking them into hers

why are you helping me?

because I can
is that alright?

I don’t want to be a burden…

sweetheart, you’re only a burden to yourself

his words sting with burning honesty
she withdraws into herself

close your eyes
I’ll take care of you

she pulls away abruptly
panic flooding her perception

how can I trust you?

here

he removes each piece of clothing
laying them in a gentle heap at his feet

is that better?

he winces as she examines his naked form
suddenly shy in his voluntary exposure
he turns his head in shame

I have a hole too, you know

you wear it well
did you mend it yourself?

yes
many times
I have to sew it every day
with a little bone needle and heart strings

come here
let me look at you

he enters the bathtub and stands facing her
in unison they slip down into the water
sitting with torsos and arms above
legs intertwining below

do you mind?

she begins to pluck at the strings
working them out of his skin
tenderly tugging out his past
passionately pulling out his memories

who did this to you?

I did

she finishes extracting the threads
and leans back in confusion

I know

he smooths the cotton cloth around her tattered tear
streaking out a sterling snowstorm
dying the warm liquid a swirling scarlet
he warily washes off her past
carefully cleanses off her memories

I want to give you something
you can do with it what you want

she watches closely as he
digs his fingers into his chest
leaving the gash gaping
fear invades her taciturnity

how can you trust me?

he nudges open her drooling cavern
and sets his heart in her cage

you found me

he snatches a clean heart string
snaps off a new splintered bone

you saw me

she grips the marble sides
now pink with their leaking ichor

you felt me

he threads the imperfect ivory needle
and presses it lightly into her skin

you heard me

he stitches her closed
sealing it with a kiss

but I’ve nothing for you…
my heart has gone missing!

no it hasn’t

she furrows her brow
new tears
pure tears
escaping

you gave it to me already

he dips her fingers into him

when you woke me

Whole

I love you,
you know

_{thank you}

Whole belongs to the following groups:

Graphic Scratch and Live, Love, Dream

Lee Grissett, 5 months ago

very powerful and creative
plyle, 5 months ago

Wow!!! Amazing and absolutely touching! Going straight to my favorites Lys! Very very very well done!
Ushna Sardar, 5 months ago

its utterly awesome! i love it!
biltongben, 5 months ago

All i can say is W O W!
sparklydina, 5 months ago

I really, really enjoyed this. Incredibly poetic and beautiful use of imagery :)
LisaG, 5 months ago

Stunning piece of writing, one of my fav’s for sure…..
jlynn, 5 months ago

WOW a very emotional moving piece!! Absolutely amazing and powerful!!
Jessica Tremp, 5 months ago

absolutely speechless
Luckyvegetable, 5 months ago

Beautiful and painful.
LostBoy1, 5 months ago

chills…
Rachael Hope, 5 months ago

Fuck Lys. Just fuck. You just break my heart every time I swear. It has this child like innocence that just is so captivating. I’m completely in love with this; I want to read it over and over so I can recapture the feeling. I want to bottle it so I can smell its scent when ever I need to and feel its calming presence. Where can I get a bottle of Lys Story? The emotion is just so strong here

I felt it, every single bit. Thank you
Natalie Foss, 5 months ago

beautiful, mesmerising…
missalyshachri..., 5 months ago

this is insanelllllllyyy goood
i couldnt stop reading =)
yeah. its just that powerful.
observer, 5 months ago

This is fantastic. I was entranced.
Well done!
Yasemin Sumner, 5 months ago

little hairs all standing up on my arms. heart a bit stupid puddle on the floor. i haven’t felt like this since my upturned nose was buried constantly in Aesop’s and Brothers Grimm…thanks for taking me back there lady…
i’m getting this tattooed beneath my eyelids so I can dream here everynight.
Rella, 5 months ago

Stunning. My eyes couldn’t take it in fast enough
Chris White, 5 months ago

Holy fuck
Antoine Piron, 5 months ago

damned there was a french anthology of fantastic short stories named “Territoires de l’Inquiétude”. This could have a place in. I mean it.
Krisso, 5 months ago

Lys, what can I say? This is beautiful, it really is.
montdragon, 5 months ago

[0^0]
amove, 5 months ago

how beautifully written, expressing what is so hard to put into words, the need and the fear of love
Alex Moir, 5 months ago

Oh God… I am crying… I am honestly crying. I love this, this touches me somewhere deep in a way no written word has… WOW.
libra88, 5 months ago

interesting very deep with compassion and understanding!!! nice, how did you make something so plain but have a deep meaning 2 it?
DiannaLee, 5 months ago

So intense and soft at the same time…I loved it, beautiful. Visually I could see sooo much! The thread…their hearts…the bath tub.
Kenny Gulley Jr., 5 months ago

damn…
Mary Campbell, 5 months ago

It drew me in and consumed me.. good poetry does that you know.
Chanel2, 5 months ago

I confess, I looked at the word count and thought, I’ll just read the first few lines (I am time poor at the moment) and here I am at the end, writing a comment to say how much I liked it :)
C.C. Arshagra, 5 months ago

Beyond the far reaches of naked and vulnerable writing.
A fine pen you have here, most unique to the point.
Excellent weave of deep poetic lines dove-tailing with tendered narrative prose.
You open my tears up and bleed my cares out through them. Wow!

A pleasure to have found your work. I’ll be watching you. Thank You! C.C.
hahpistuff, 5 months ago

omg….this is freaking amazing, one of the best pieces i have ever head! kudos to you!
vanesse, 5 months ago

quite amazing and captivating piece… BRAVO! :o)
Naylor, 5 months ago

Your words have moved me to tears …. the emotions so raw and honest … you are amazing !!! I can only hope to ever be able to write with such impact !!!!!! (((((((((HUG))))))))))))) thank you for letting us share in your talent :)
pleb6264life, 5 months ago

I absolutly love it. You’re fanastic at writing this stuff.
lolowe, 5 months ago

I don’t even know what to say this was so beautiful..
luciec, 5 months ago

beautiful.
Melanie Armstrong, 5 months ago

This is amazingly well written. <33>

It gave me chills.
Glenn-Patrick ..., 5 months ago

Fucking brilliant
Joyce Dickens,..., 5 months ago

I am in awe! What an emotive, powerful piece; Your head must be exploding with so many wonderful thoughts and not enough time to get them all written…..this is incredible!
taliamurphy, 4 months ago

...so awesomely unique…and fragile.
missheels, 4 months ago

This is one of the most moving pieces of work I have ever read…. Simply beautiful. Thank you for sharing such beauty with the world. A real favourite.
Nicole Ryan, 4 months ago

wow lys .. this is full on. so powerful.

[she begins to pluck at the strings
working them out of his skin
tenderly tugging out his past
passionately pulling out his memories]

THAT is where i began to truly choke up

you’re amazing beautiful girl xx
TearNee, 4 months ago

This is beautiful, brings tears to my eyes and everything.
comfyzen, 4 months ago

I couldn’t stop reading this. Sounds like True Love…between God and man, or man and woman—just beautiful. sigh this reading struck all the chords in me! Makes me wanna hug ‘him’ so close we pass through each other…
comfyzen, 4 months ago

And oh yeah, you need to GET THIS PUBLISHED! You’ve got it girl—I’m so for real, your name next to other great literary geniuses like Poe, Shakespeare, Longfellow, etc., is not unfathomable!
Lys • in reply to comfyzen’s comment, 4 months ago

oh gosh…i’m blushing! thank you from the deepest, tightest corners of my heart :)
comfyzen, 4 months ago

NO, thank YOU! really :)
NewDawnPhoto, 4 months ago

Outstanding work Lys. Myself, I do not read often. So glad I did here. Everyone should read this…
lilgem4u, 4 months ago

WOW.. this is amazing. This is true love.
eXposure, 4 months ago

superbly written …
oh wow just lovely
JenniferB, 4 months ago

could’ve sworn i’d already commented on this piece… maybe i did but i spoke a lot of shit, lol :~~) I love this piece of writing, i keep coming back to read it time after time… wanna join my cult? ;~~)
Alix Purcell, 4 months ago

Wow Lys, this is seriously incredible. You have an amazingly unique ways of describing things that is still so accessible… and beautiful beautiful beatuiful. How you came up with this I’ll never know, but I’ll always wonder. —A
loramae, 4 months ago

Hmmm…the depth of emotion this evokes is indescribable…WoW!
Saskia Greta S..., 4 months ago

Ilike the beauty in the sadness of this
Max Berggren, 4 months ago

I really love the imagery in this one, all of your texts i’ve read I have to say that i can really see them in front of me! Sadness, i don’t know.. i just feel the girl/woman is really confused.. really beautiful!

oh and you got amazing photos as well, KnoW skateboarding is brilliant :)
Peter Coleman, 4 months ago

beautiful
images every step
imperfect ivory needle…fuck wow
very good stuff, love the link through your overview
wouldn’t have found you otherwise
INcreations, 4 months ago

powerful and moving.
Lenny La Rue, IPA, 4 months ago

Now I know. Now I understand. Now I can say ‘thank you’ to you as well.
LindaR, 4 months ago

speechless, Lys…your words go deep and true…wrapped in imagery that is so piercing ~ this will be with me in the days to come…xx
9TyLeRAuStIN9, 4 months ago

I want to read this everyday. You are good.
Jboo09, 4 months ago

Oh my, Lys this is beautiful. I could hardly read it through the tears that were welling up in my eyes. You perfectly portrayed the uncertainty, the fear, the doubt, the pain, the longing, the desire, the need, the surrender… giving your heart to someone is not always easy, but without ever feeling passion like you described how would life be worth living?
buddykfa, 4 months ago

Hi, Lys, I thought that I had sent you a comment already but it seems to have disappeared :(.
So, I will try once more.
I just read this piece and my reaction is one of ‘wow’ but not in surprise. Having read your work before, I am only once again impressed. I think that as writers, we try to reach someone enough to lead them into our world long enough to ‘see & feel’ the ideas, places, emotions and experiences that are on the stage of our minds, that day.
I feel you do this very well and that you have succeeded in doing it yet once again.
You know, I write and I have a few people that follow or just ‘taste’ a piece but I know that I don’t have the impact that you do. This is meant to be a compliment.
So, anyway, job well done, lys! Job well done, again,
also, diggin’ the new bio pic lol.
stay well my buddy
kathaleen :)
Natsky, 4 months ago

I have goosebumps and shivers reading this. So fragile and vulnerable and brave. Thank you for sharing your heartstrings with us and hopefully helping some to take a chance. There is no better world than one full of love. Beautiful…
oscarelizondo, 4 months ago

Cleaver, you did amazing with the way you let us on. Wow, powerful enough to make my blood drip with every word you described extensively. The thrills and chills were electrifing as you made our minds want to go into the future of what might be happening, yet , the feeling of being led without us being able to control the urges of the pain infliction. Brillant work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Brett Foster, 4 months ago

Bloody amazing!
Paul Louis Vil..., 4 months ago

Wow, what an amazing body of work.
This is pure poetry an one day should be made into a short film…. it is that good! :D
F Magdalene Au..., 4 months ago

I can add nothing to the comments of value so I’ll just say Bravo!!! My gracious, Bravo!!!!!

Austin
Arjun Veer Chadha, 4 months ago

wow the only word I have is ‘beautiful’.
greeneyedlady, 4 months ago

“I wanted to see if I could feel”.... my, my, what a heartbreaking poem. I’m sorry for myself that I identify with it so much, but grateful to you for sharing it with us here. Great job!
Mark Peterson, 4 months ago

Fantastic Lys…powerful!
chazz, 4 months ago

WOW!!!
kutkolors, 4 months ago

Deeply moving and raw but feels incomplete. Don’t get me wrong, there is something so powerful about this piece, maybe it’s just that I want to keep reading. What prompted this?
Conjure, 4 months ago

I love your rhythm, your words flowed straight into my mind. There were a couple of cliched expressions that interrupted my reading, but generally I love your theme and disposition.

This actually reminded me a little bit of Sylvia Plath’s ‘The Applicant’ – http://www.angelfire.com/tn/plath/applicant.html

Hers has less flow, but there are enough similarities to bother linking, I think.
jemimalovesbigted, 3 months ago

It makes me sad, but in a wonderful way.
natapee, 3 months ago

outstanding and touching.
DaisyLadiE, 3 months ago

materpiece…what else can one say.
DaisyLadiE, 3 months ago

masterpiece even…lol
barnsy, 3 months ago

this is very strange but i like strange.
though im wanreding what on earth is happening to the world at the moment because i recently watched pan’s labyrinth and to have just read this similarly weird but magnificent piece is great.
finally people are no longer conforming to the standard norm of the past.
andreasphoto, 2 months ago

great – I HAD to read it till the end
Laura Cutmore, 2 months ago

wow.. i read the first few sentences and then couldn’t stop until I’d finished. So moving. I’m not usually one for reading things that people have written on here, but I truly loved that.
Taine, 2 months ago

Fantastic Lys….
aglaia b, 2 months ago

beautiful! ;-)
Brandylynn, 2 months ago

When I got to the part when she undoes his strings I thought, ” Uh oh, here’s the part where she ruins all his healing efforts”, then instead he says he has to resow everyday. Then I knew you were feeding us truth and strength instead of just another excuse to bleed. Well done.
flowerchile2ra, 2 months ago

soul extraction/and a simple/ yet far reaching/ thank you may be o.k./ this stays with me/ forever/
rhett
ToastedGhost, 2 months ago

Rarely am I left speechless
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beautiful
Priscilla Rodr..., 2 months ago

fantastic piece of writing.
amethystlune, 2 months ago

wow.
Bruce Watson, 2 months ago

Charming and dreamlike.
brotherabbit, 2 months ago

what can i say that hasn’t been said already? i was completely drawn in by this piece. i rarely find something that, even for a short time, consumes my focus. the imagery, the rawness of the emotions. i’m sitting at my desk with tears welling up in my eyes. Perhaps this is particularly poignant to me at the moment as i’m sure it is to many. I hope that more people will read this and feel hope amid their pain.
R
Talkingwatermelon, 2 months ago

“What can I say that hasn’t already been said?” ...
Even that’s been taken…
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Wow.
Ryan Piercey, about 1 month ago

Very fascinating piece… Powerful and heartwarming!
bfrida, about 1 month ago

thank you
Craig Shillington, about 1 month ago

This has left me with incredible hope and faith!!! I AM in love!!
Anna Williams, about 1 month ago

I love this! I used a similar metaphor once a few years ago in a poem…stitching wounds of the past with needles made of bone…so I was captivated to read this! very well done! I’ve already read it 4 times now! very nicely written!
myoriginalsin, about 1 month ago

Hauntingly beautiful….
Lindsay Berman, about 1 month ago

Absolutely outstanding!!!!!
Artway, about 1 month ago

Oh my gosh, I am so glad I read that! Thats beautiful, I have to save this to favourites!
Tracey Mac, about 1 month ago

You write like a dream weaver…this is stunning, so beautiful…....
SoxyFleming, 19 days ago

he begins drawing an ivory bath
with water so clear and sparkling

so good that someone can
Karirose, 3 days ago

I’d read this quite a while back, but apparently never came up with a way to express my thoughts on it. I still don’t have the exact words I’d like but will make do with what I have.

I do so much like the visual of it all. And the beautifully creative and expressive way you’ve handled matters of the heart. Just beautiful.