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Wow!!! Amazing and absolutely touching! Going straight to my favorites Lys! Very very very well done!

its utterly awesome! i love it!

All i can say is W O W!

I really, really enjoyed this. Incredibly poetic and beautiful use of imagery :)

Stunning piece of writing, one of my fav’s for sure…..

WOW a very emotional moving piece!! Absolutely amazing and powerful!!

absolutely speechless

Beautiful and painful.

chills…

Fuck Lys. Just fuck. You just break my heart every time I swear. It has this child like innocence that just is so captivating. I’m completely in love with this; I want to read it over and over so I can recapture the feeling. I want to bottle it so I can smell its scent when ever I need to and feel its calming presence. Where can I get a bottle of Lys Story? The emotion is just so strong here

I felt it, every single bit. Thank you

beautiful, mesmerising…

this is insanelllllllyyy goood
i couldnt stop reading =)
yeah. its just that powerful.

This is fantastic. I was entranced.
Well done!

little hairs all standing up on my arms. heart a bit stupid puddle on the floor. i haven’t felt like this since my upturned nose was buried constantly in Aesop’s and Brothers Grimm…thanks for taking me back there lady…
i’m getting this tattooed beneath my eyelids so I can dream here everynight.

Stunning. My eyes couldn’t take it in fast enough

Holy fuck

damned there was a french anthology of fantastic short stories named “Territoires de l’Inquiétude”. This could have a place in. I mean it.

Lys, what can I say? This is beautiful, it really is.

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how beautifully written, expressing what is so hard to put into words, the need and the fear of love

Oh God… I am crying… I am honestly crying. I love this, this touches me somewhere deep in a way no written word has… WOW.

interesting very deep with compassion and understanding!!! nice, how did you make something so plain but have a deep meaning 2 it?

So intense and soft at the same time…I loved it, beautiful. Visually I could see sooo much! The thread…their hearts…the bath tub.

damn…

It drew me in and consumed me.. good poetry does that you know.

I confess, I looked at the word count and thought, I’ll just read the first few lines (I am time poor at the moment) and here I am at the end, writing a comment to say how much I liked it :)

Beyond the far reaches of naked and vulnerable writing.
A fine pen you have here, most unique to the point.
Excellent weave of deep poetic lines dove-tailing with tendered narrative prose.
You open my tears up and bleed my cares out through them. Wow!

A pleasure to have found your work. I’ll be watching you. Thank You! C.C.

omg….this is freaking amazing, one of the best pieces i have ever head! kudos to you!

quite amazing and captivating piece… BRAVO! :o)

Your words have moved me to tears …. the emotions so raw and honest … you are amazing !!! I can only hope to ever be able to write with such impact !!!!!! (((((((((HUG))))))))))))) thank you for letting us share in your talent :)

I absolutly love it. You’re fanastic at writing this stuff.

I don’t even know what to say this was so beautiful..

beautiful.

This is amazingly well written. <33>

It gave me chills.

Fucking brilliant

I am in awe! What an emotive, powerful piece; Your head must be exploding with so many wonderful thoughts and not enough time to get them all written…..this is incredible!

...so awesomely unique…and fragile.

This is one of the most moving pieces of work I have ever read…. Simply beautiful. Thank you for sharing such beauty with the world. A real favourite.

wow lys .. this is full on. so powerful.

[she begins to pluck at the strings
working them out of his skin
tenderly tugging out his past
passionately pulling out his memories]

THAT is where i began to truly choke up

you’re amazing beautiful girl xx

This is beautiful, brings tears to my eyes and everything.

I couldn’t stop reading this. Sounds like True Love…between God and man, or man and woman—just beautiful. sigh this reading struck all the chords in me! Makes me wanna hug ‘him’ so close we pass through each other…

And oh yeah, you need to GET THIS PUBLISHED! You’ve got it girl—I’m so for real, your name next to other great literary geniuses like Poe, Shakespeare, Longfellow, etc., is not unfathomable!

NO, thank YOU! really :)

Outstanding work Lys. Myself, I do not read often. So glad I did here. Everyone should read this…

WOW.. this is amazing. This is true love.

superbly written …
oh wow just lovely

could’ve sworn i’d already commented on this piece… maybe i did but i spoke a lot of shit, lol :) I love this piece of writing, i keep coming back to read it time after time… wanna join my cult? ;)

Wow Lys, this is seriously incredible. You have an amazingly unique ways of describing things that is still so accessible… and beautiful beautiful beatuiful. How you came up with this I’ll never know, but I’ll always wonder. —A

Hmmm…the depth of emotion this evokes is indescribable…WoW!

Ilike the beauty in the sadness of this

I really love the imagery in this one, all of your texts i’ve read I have to say that i can really see them in front of me! Sadness, i don’t know.. i just feel the girl/woman is really confused.. really beautiful!

oh and you got amazing photos as well, KnoW skateboarding is brilliant :)

beautiful
images every step
imperfect ivory needle…fuck wow
very good stuff, love the link through your overview
wouldn’t have found you otherwise

powerful and moving.

Now I know. Now I understand. Now I can say ‘thank you’ to you as well.

speechless, Lys…your words go deep and true…wrapped in imagery that is so piercing ~ this will be with me in the days to come…xx

I want to read this everyday. You are good.

Oh my, Lys this is beautiful. I could hardly read it through the tears that were welling up in my eyes. You perfectly portrayed the uncertainty, the fear, the doubt, the pain, the longing, the desire, the need, the surrender… giving your heart to someone is not always easy, but without ever feeling passion like you described how would life be worth living?

Hi, Lys, I thought that I had sent you a comment already but it seems to have disappeared :(.
So, I will try once more.
I just read this piece and my reaction is one of ‘wow’ but not in surprise. Having read your work before, I am only once again impressed. I think that as writers, we try to reach someone enough to lead them into our world long enough to ‘see & feel’ the ideas, places, emotions and experiences that are on the stage of our minds, that day.
I feel you do this very well and that you have succeeded in doing it yet once again.
You know, I write and I have a few people that follow or just ‘taste’ a piece but I know that I don’t have the impact that you do. This is meant to be a compliment.
So, anyway, job well done, lys! Job well done, again,
also, diggin’ the new bio pic lol.
stay well my buddy
kathaleen :)

I have goosebumps and shivers reading this. So fragile and vulnerable and brave. Thank you for sharing your heartstrings with us and hopefully helping some to take a chance. There is no better world than one full of love. Beautiful…

Cleaver, you did amazing with the way you let us on. Wow, powerful enough to make my blood drip with every word you described extensively. The thrills and chills were electrifing as you made our minds want to go into the future of what might be happening, yet , the feeling of being led without us being able to control the urges of the pain infliction. Brillant work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Bloody amazing!

Wow, what an amazing body of work.
This is pure poetry an one day should be made into a short film…. it is that good! :D

I can add nothing to the comments of value so I’ll just say Bravo!!! My gracious, Bravo!!!!!

Austin

wow the only word I have is ‘beautiful’.

“I wanted to see if I could feel”.... my, my, what a heartbreaking poem. I’m sorry for myself that I identify with it so much, but grateful to you for sharing it with us here. Great job!

Fantastic Lys…powerful!

WOW!!!

Deeply moving and raw but feels incomplete. Don’t get me wrong, there is something so powerful about this piece, maybe it’s just that I want to keep reading. What prompted this?

I love your rhythm, your words flowed straight into my mind. There were a couple of cliched expressions that interrupted my reading, but generally I love your theme and disposition.

This actually reminded me a little bit of Sylvia Plath’s ‘The Applicant’ – http://www.angelfire.com/tn/plath/applicant.html

Hers has less flow, but there are enough similarities to bother linking, I think.

It makes me sad, but in a wonderful way.

outstanding and touching.

materpiece…what else can one say.

masterpiece even…lol

this is very strange but i like strange.
though im wanreding what on earth is happening to the world at the moment because i recently watched pan’s labyrinth and to have just read this similarly weird but magnificent piece is great.
finally people are no longer conforming to the standard norm of the past.

great – I HAD to read it till the end

wow.. i read the first few sentences and then couldn’t stop until I’d finished. So moving. I’m not usually one for reading things that people have written on here, but I truly loved that.

Fantastic Lys….

beautiful! ;-)

When I got to the part when she undoes his strings I thought, ” Uh oh, here’s the part where she ruins all his healing efforts”, then instead he says he has to resow everyday. Then I knew you were feeding us truth and strength instead of just another excuse to bleed. Well done.

soul extraction/and a simple/ yet far reaching/ thank you may be o.k./ this stays with me/ forever/
rhett

Rarely am I left speechless
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beautiful

fantastic piece of writing.

wow.

Charming and dreamlike.

what can i say that hasn’t been said already? i was completely drawn in by this piece. i rarely find something that, even for a short time, consumes my focus. the imagery, the rawness of the emotions. i’m sitting at my desk with tears welling up in my eyes. Perhaps this is particularly poignant to me at the moment as i’m sure it is to many. I hope that more people will read this and feel hope amid their pain.
R

“What can I say that hasn’t already been said?” ...
Even that’s been taken…
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Wow.

Very fascinating piece… Powerful and heartwarming!

thank you

This has left me with incredible hope and faith!!! I AM in love!!

I love this! I used a similar metaphor once a few years ago in a poem…stitching wounds of the past with needles made of bone…so I was captivated to read this! very well done! I’ve already read it 4 times now! very nicely written!

Hauntingly beautiful….

Absolutely outstanding!!!!!

Oh my gosh, I am so glad I read that! Thats beautiful, I have to save this to favourites!

You write like a dream weaver…this is stunning, so beautiful…....

he begins drawing an ivory bath
with water so clear and sparkling

so good that someone can

I’d read this quite a while back, but apparently never came up with a way to express my thoughts on it. I still don’t have the exact words I’d like but will make do with what I have.

I do so much like the visual of it all. And the beautifully creative and expressive way you’ve handled matters of the heart. Just beautiful.

Just amazing. You are quite extraordinary with your writing.

Read it twice… would read again…
Read all comments… WOW.
Very touchy and deep and romantic and true.
Thank You! xx Elvira

Took me a moment to figure out what this was about, but when I realised it I was like ‘OH MY GOD’. Very awesome. =)

That is…wow

I don’t think I have ever read anything like that before.

I wanted to see

see what?

if I could feel

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“sweetheart, you’re only a burden to yourself”

I am in awe.

I have goose-bumps running up and down my arms- this is honestly brilliant and brilliantly honest. Thank-you.

Best piece of literature I’ve had the privelage to read in a very long time! Brilliant.

Great!

What can be better to exchange with each other the hearts, instead of rings…

Amazing, Lys. I love how creativily you go about being romantic and aberrant and fantastic.

One of THE best literary pieces I have seen during my life.

Perfection needs no comment … yet …
Commands comment
This is perfect in the very best way
Question …. confusion …. then sheer bliss!
STUNNING!
BREATHTAKING!
BRAVO!
~ adgray your servant!
♥

Compelling – I didn’t really have time to finish it but I couldn’t stop reading!

Beautiful. I was entranced the whole time I was reading it. Nice work!

i can strongly relate to this; love how it was creatively written :)

very beautiful and full of imagery i think this would make an interesting short film :) great work!

Jeez.
I know I already commented but I love this a lot so I re-read and re-commented lol.

I felt every single word of this, its so moving, I read it then re-read it several times..so touching….anna : )

Not only original and contemporary…but also passionate, gripping, raw, and even haunting. I loved every word- and thanks to Annette Hagger for sharing it with me :)

She wanted to feel it  and guess what we all did – look at the comments. This is very powerful experience we all had and some still having but how many of us recognized it so profoundly – hmmm nah, enough words you said it all – GREAT!

I’m new, this is the first piece I’ve read.
This is really good, I am so glad I read it.
Bravo..
Thank you for sharing.

This is breathtaking I am speechless…..I love this so much…. Instant favorite.

I love this so much…..so tender and so passionate…..beautiful!! xx

You know, this is one of the few poems that I just love coming back to read again and again. I just read this for the one billionth time and it feels like i read it for the very first time. I really love this poem, I wish to be able to write something like this someday. XX

To this day this poem, which in my mind is so much more than a poem, still gives me goosebumps.
There is so much more emotion in you than even you give yourself credit for, at times, and this writing is a testament to that truth. I have had to read and re-read this piece so many times to get a hold of what it does to me that some of the words will be forever embedded within my psyche.
Humility, desire, anger, love, fear, compassion, for yourself and the other, all dance back and forth to create something so profound it is no wonder it remains at the top of the list as most popular. I can’t imagine writing like this everyday, my body couldn’t take it. Maybe that is what is most evocative about this writing (I have a hard time calling it poem, it sounds so limiting, like ‘writing’ is so much better), the ascent from the tangible, corporeal realm to something elusive…the spiritual. Any yet it plays consciousness like a lyre. Remarkable, just like the writer.

FREAKING EPIC

No words will come to me ….......just wow…......oh wow !!

ooh i like this.
very nice idea.
i could see it all happening.
i love it :)

good work!

Beautifully written… am with Rebecca…just wow:)

I love this piece! ♥
I come here to your hole and read it often
It helps to mend my hole
Did you know?
♥ =0þ

I “know” it has been said before, but it’s beautiful!

I remember reading this way back when .. i’m glad to have revisited it, an incredible piece of writing lys, absolutely beautiful x

Such a beautiful piece, the feeling that washes over me is overwhelming, but wonderful.

what a totally brilliant, original, viceral piece of writing; no, piece of humanity…piece of god and what love means.
I’m blown away. beautiful!!!!!

totally stunning, I can find no other words fitting for this this… just stunning… x