in a shell
in a shell belongs to the following groups:
All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Graphic Scratch and WMGdreams
of
feathers
and
wings
for
flying
rolled
in
eggshell
floating
in
white
blood
and
bone
lungs
trapped
beating
mechanical
heart
cold
and
wet
time
is
lonely
feeling
numbed
by
pinched
nerves
twirling
and
creeping
between
plasticky
pockets
life
pulsing
and
pressing
growing
tight
claustrophobia
settles
in
the
smallest
wrinkle
right
behind
the
blinded
black
orbs
sealed
safe
under
a
trembling
pink
membrane
and
the
first
and
last
tooth
sticks
into
the
womb
cracking
fissures
rip
across
the
surface
liquid
spills
lungs
swallow
skin
twitches
light
pours
in
to
replace
space
and
eyes
open
wide
Amorous Requiem
love the style reminds me of my friend jen… good write!
markgb
i
love
this
it
is
an
instant
fav
for
sure
Lisa Jewell
Fantastic flow and use of words……. xox
Dave Legere
simple and effective. good stuff.
dave
PJ Ryan
Lys, i really enjoyed reading this.. the flow is incredible and the way each word has a double meaning both before and after the next word is brilliant ..
one quick thing i noticed ..
lights pours .. make one of those words singular .. it’ll be perfect then xx
Lys • replied
oh gosh, thanks so much for that! writing on airplanes isn’t as easy as one might think!
(muah!)
Jonathan Acost...
I really love this new style, what motivated you to do one word lines? It really adds so much personal gravitas.
Lys • replied
honestly, i’m not really sure. it’s more of a challenge for me to write with the one word per line and to remember to start a new line instead of a space. also, i’m trying to eliminate periods, i want the whole piece to flow and i want the reader to interpret the breaks wherever they want. i’m hoping it’s a little more interactive than just glancing over a block of text.
thanks so much :)