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The softness of her
as a breeze
slips through his lungs
breathing in the little of her

His mouth warms wanting to
sweeten her words to his words

Naked in the glint of his eyes
some days he see her not
a glimpsing wish that faded from sight

Yet he see the outer edges
the bricker brackle
and stays hoping for another day
of wishful breezes

Straining at the frame
she talks silently to his shadow
“see me”

Gravity has not changed
it was as it was at the beginning
the atoms of her heart have rearranged
a blot in the love graph

Their flower still grows
They are deciding on the fragrance
Who will be the sun?
Who will be the soil?
They get thirsty and drink hopeful water

© K S Hardy 2010

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Years can change the garden …
Is there still hope if we nurture the bloom of possibility?

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  • Cosimo Piro
    Cosimo Piroover 4 years ago

    like a hologram….never quite catching the essence but maintaining some semblance of contact….flickering a longing to be noticed…..seen……recognised. Hope still remains in the same waters they drink. An insightful write KarenSue, I think, about the tentative nature of relationships. xoxo

  • Cos ….you so get this prose. That is exactly what it is about….relationships can bounce in so many directions even in 24 hours. I wrote here about how what may have been a dynamic in the beginning of a relationship can be worn away with time and sometimes better or worse can find its way…
    In this particular prose there is still the main basic ingredients that keep a relationship nurtured so there is still potential. I think it is impossible to find everything we need/want in one person we are just not built that way, we make the most of who we are and who we are with me thinks….xxxx

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • sandra .
    sandra .over 4 years ago

    Doll, relationships are interesting things…change in all things is maybe inevitable, but if there is a desire for mutual respect and love, well who knows :)) dunno, my baffled take on all things love. :)
    A heartfelt and ‘thorty’ write KarenSue, thanks
    Sandra x

  • Hi Sandra…relationships so many kinds , some a little thinner than others, some strong and thick to stand the test of time …Hmmmm sounding bit like a tissue paper me thinks. Some transparent and some multicoloured for many years of exploring all the colours…
    The ones that rip and tear is the law of attrition and we can sweep the pieces up to discard when we feel the time is right…
    Hate it when little annoying bits get stuck in the cracks ;o) xxxx

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • Teacup
    Teacupover 4 years ago

    Straining at the frame
    she talks silently to his shadow
    “see me”
    … I’m drawn back to these few lines… that desire to be seen for the person you really are… I want to believe in the hope of possibilties no matter how the garden grows and changes through the seasons and years… beautiful dear Karen. xx

  • Hi….I know we see each other..
    And thankful I am to know I have you so close….
    Even if we don’t have our glasses on we still see with such clarity me thinks..xxx

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • BigPauly
    BigPaulyover 4 years ago

    I like the work :-)

  • Hi Paul
    I like your visit :O)

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • JaneSolomon1
    JaneSolomon1over 4 years ago

    I’m all for drinking hopeful water KS. xx

  • We can get mighty thirsty sometimes…..ahhhh a long drink of what is hope is really so heart refreshing….xxx

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • wigs
    wigsover 4 years ago

    Gravity has not changed
    it was as it was at the beginning
    the atoms of her heart have rearranged
    a blot in the love graph

    the inevitability of change, but whilst there’s hope there’s optimism
    lovely piece of writing xx

  • Change is something that I have struggled with in the past….I tended to keep things if they seem to be working with the way fix it if it ain’t broken deal…..But as maturity in my heart grew I started to see that to venture beyond the safety net of what we know can open so many wonderful doors….Even changes in a relationship can bring about more that can be good me thinks…
    Thank you for your really lovely comment xx

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • umbra
    umbraover 4 years ago

    an ode to hope….

  • Exacto ! A clink of glasses as we agree :O))

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • Leon A.  Walker
    Leon A. Walkerover 4 years ago

    This is really thoughtful and well crafted writing my friend!!! Fabulous work!!!

  • Howdy Leon
    Thank you kindly …xxx

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • lianne
    lianneover 4 years ago

    “See me…” in all the beautiful words of longing and hope, these simple two words stand out for me as the heart of it all. Do we not all long to be “seen” – understood, accepted and loved for who we are right now, for all the ways we have changed, for becoming more of who we are. Love me like that…and let love endure and flourish in the changes. So profoundly beautiful KarenSue. xox

  • I so wonder how much I ever will be seen and that is because I will keep a lot close to me …..Nothing worse than opening up the view to us and to have it either trampled or people getting lost and asking lots of questions on which way is the beginning and which way is the exit!
    And yes when we change what is known of us there can be a subtle shift in the dynamics and both parties need to readjust….and yep here it comes ….Time ….always it gets back to time… too much or too little ….xxxx

    – Arcadia Tempest

  • Erika Tirado
    Erika Tiradoover 4 years ago

    oh dear KS…
    on of your most powerful in my opinion. Can feel the questioning, the doubt, the want, the hope… love is the soil and the sun…. but deciding who gets to take care of those things is the question….

    I so would drink hopeful water too… xoxo

  • On reflection later about this prose I thought that the role of soil and sun would be swapped around at times….so a complimentary sharing of keeping the garden well tended and nurtured….I often see in relationships it is not an even 50 /50 but it can still work me thinks if both are happy with the way the end result achieved…..
    Geezzz thirsty now after all that! XXX

    – Arcadia Tempest

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