Impossible ME

I can only say that I love you for these words. xxxx

KarenSue….have you ever made ‘impossible pie?’
The ingredients in it, turn upside down and ‘metamorph’ into something else…......in a nice way ;)
Sounds like you :)
sandra…. .the impossible pie of her mind!!

Lovely! I so relate! ;~)

I can’t let the real me out in the full daylight… I fear kinship with the vampire and I would burn with sun’s spotlight on my tender side.
The world can’t know my softness it is the only thing I have left that is not tainted.......the only thing that is left untouched, and I hold it close to me…
Karen your writing just resonates with me so much. Thank you again, for writing this xxx

Erika got it first.. I feel you sister.. all of you.. I just know that you know best what makes you feel good or not.. Your one of the most beautiful Vamps I know.. and I mean that 360 straight UP!

Fantastic….i do know this feeling so well….wonderfully written :)x

Oh my yes…..I suspect we all keep some part of our self safely tucked inside….

A profound piece my darling…xxx

Wow!!!!!! I agree definitely profound!!!! You are awesome!!!!!! xoxooxox

Incredib;y profound , and so brilliantly written and articulated.

Being your beautiful self is enough.
Sink into the peace of your self and there lies happiness.
Great piece !

Congrats on your Feature!!! sending you big HUGS<<<>>>>> ok however you spell it!! xoxo

We are all different, I get that feeling when I write too much and nobody really reads anymore because I bore them. They don’t seem to understand that my mind is full of things to say, I can only come out at when the sun won’t burn my skin. I understand every word you speak of and I respect it to fullles. Stand you ground, I do, it is what makes us whole again. Great work and out of sight.

interesting the perspective. Although, I’d reconsider the use of the ellipses. I understand that it’s to represent broken thought, yet it also tends to break the flow of the work. Otherwise, a good piece

awful

It sounds quite possible to me KarenSue, but then anything’s possible, congrats on the feature, well deserved :-)

An emotive write that reminded me of THIS
CONGRATS on the feature too ;) xoxox ♥

At the wholly acceptable risk of sounding simply incredulous,
I must rebut your outright attack on my “understanding.”
Would that you had the sense and decency to accept my
completely honest opinion of this piece of writing for
what it is – my opinion. It was not an assault on your intelligence,
merely your skill as a writer. How could you judge or measure my
understanding of you, or this piece (in regards to technical quality)
based solely upon a single word review? Please understand that the
preceding was rhetoric, because clearly, you cannot have made any
informed or quantitative conclusion of the mass or scope of my
understanding or wisdom based upon this one word.
Rather than attempt to carry on any fumbling semblance of a
conversation with you over the quality of this piece or what you
deem a deficiency of personal wisdom on my part, I will simply reiterate,
and be done with it. This piece is awful.
Also, you may consider learning to control your emotions before
attempting to put any thought into written form, as your ire shows
within your reply in the form of poor grammar and syntax.
What follows is how your malicious reply to my comment should
have been arranged and punctuated:

“Clearly, you don’t understand.
Don’t fret – you will learn some wisdom… hopefully.”

To clarify the modifications, I will append a general analysis of
my reworking of your two sentences. The word “clearly” should be
followed by a comma, so as to offset it from the subject of the sentence,
thereby nullifying any possibility of confusing the reader.
By that, I mean that the sentence could be misinterpreted so
that it seems that you are addressing a a person who is transluscent.
The same error occurs in the second sentence.
Again, the ultimate goal is to address the reader in terms
that they can comprehend. You should perhaps try to write as if
the sentence were being read aloud, and insert punctation marks,
such as commas, where there would naturally be a pause in the speech.
The next point I would like to address is the use of ellipsis.
Ellipsis, by definition, contain only three dots.
Finally, your use of a pair of double question marks is highly befuddling,
since these typically only follow interrogatives.
Are you unsure of your hope for my acquisition of wisdom or understanding?
Certainly not…

this is for the comments above by Damian Frost-
who the hell made you writing king? if you want to follow all the rules of grammer and syntax and are intent on making sure all words and sentences are clearly understood- go write a fucking research paper. or go teach a writing course (wait, dont do that, you will suffocate the writers in the class- it would have to be a technical writing class), or better yet- write a grammar book. you want to write it in American English or British English b/c the grammar is different, mister. Since when does art have to follow rules? Isn’t that what art is about- expressing yourself in ways that don’t necessarily follow mainstream thinking? Come on over to my site and read my stuff- my lack of correct grammar and syntax will give you a stroke….. (and notice there are more than 3 dots in that ellipsis)

oh man, so pompous Damien, did your mother never teach you,
“if you can’t say something nice, say nothing”

all you have done is show off your deluded superiority,
deluded, because it is, as you say, only your opinion,

no one else would think you superior,
or are you fulfilling some deep seated desire for recognition

as for being picky, “addressing a a person” perhaps you should practice what you preach

Kriss

btw- arcadia i loe this piece and you know how i like to pick out lines of yours that i feel-
I am impossible to tame and mold into what I cannot be yet I am a chameleon.
this one is it for me….........................
mwah

The world can’t know my softness it is the only thing I have left that is not tainted. I like this, nicely expressive…

Ahh, Arcadia – I am laughing to myself as I read Damien Frost’s diatribe. It always amazes me when I come across someone so determined to elevate him/herself by demeaning another…for no good reason, whatsoever. Speaks to their character, or lack thereof. ;)

And, for what it’s worth, I like this piece as there are several lines that ring true for me.

Cheers!
Kaz

Lovely expression of self.

its possible to do the impossible even if its improbable
great writing hun
as for damien… seriously ? theres a decent way to critique someone, you seem to know a lot about grammar but nothing about social skills.

Oh, my! Just look at the stirring here!

Rubyjo, you clearly have not read any of my writing.
I refrain from using punctuation at all, thereby allowing the
reader to form or destroy their own sentences, and thus
impose their own will on each line. It is not a issue of grammatical
propensity that is so bothersome, but rather the misuse of
grammar and punctuation in general. Also, I am in my third year
toward my bachelors degree in English so, yes, many research
papers have and will come from me. I could send you copies, if
you like.

CLiPiCs, believe me, my sense of superiority is in no way deluded.
As for recognition, aren’t all humans seeking that in some way;
whether through art or murder, graffiti or having the longest finger nails in the world.
Is recognition and posthumous longevity of the remembrance of one’s existence
not one of mankind’s more baser instincts?
Also, it seems to me that you merely split hairs by drawing comparisons between
a my typographical error and Arcadia’s outright molestation of the English language.

KNGodin, please believe I meant no ill-will toward Arcadia as a person. Rather, I was stating an opinion, which from what I am told, I am perfectly entitled to, whether it be a shining review or not. As for personal elevation, there are much simpler and less taxing methods at my disposal to raise my self-esteem if ever I find it lacking. Furthermore, you have an uncanny skill, it seems, at gauging character if you are capable of doing so simply by reading over a few lines of text. Kudos.

Thank you all for reading and commenting, and commenting, and commenting…
Verba volant, scripta manet.

Damien, you state you meant no ill will toward Arcadia, yet your first comment was “awful”. That is perhaps the worst attempt at constructive criticism I’ve ever read.

Please note for future reference. There is a writer’s forum in the general forum. Writers wishing to have their work critiqued can place it there.

Unsolicited waffle is frowned upon.

At least have the common decency to bubblemail the writer.

Dear Damien, who died and made you the grammar police? Please spare us of your nauseating arrogance, grandiosity and deluded superiority. What part of play nice don’t you understand? If you have CONSTRUCTIVE criticism you would be well advised to follow LisaG’s advice and bubble mail it. Regretfully, there are degrees in English but none in wisdom and tact. Perhaps this why few have commented on your work.
Please go back to school until you are ready to join the human race.
I’m sure that you are good at writing “research papers” but please allow others to express themselves without your verbal flogging. All the good grammar in the world won’t give you the ability to move people.

“Again, the ultimate goal is to address the reader in terms
that they can comprehend.”

Perhaps this is why your work seems to lack passion. And yes, I have read some of it.

ambient-1

Rather, I was stating an opinion, which from what I am told, I am perfectly entitled to, whether it be a shining review or not.

Incorrect

Nice work Arcadia – it comes from the heart and makes one think.

Absolutely awesome writing. Love your vulnerability and honesty here. Warm congrats! Love, Shar xoxo

To Damien: You feign surprise at all the emotional responses you have elicited, yet your original, one word comment was clearly intended as a provocation. Most of us on RB welcome criticism, as long as it’s constructive. If you had stated why you thought the piece was ‘awful’ in your first comment, you might have headed off a lot of the caustic responses… and gained a little bit of respect.
Hi KarenSue :) I agree with Damien to a point: Your grammar could do with some refinement. Sometimes when I’m reading your work, it can feel a little clunky. Maybe you could try chopping up sentences to keep it from getting bogged down. As an example, the line :
‘I know there is motive behind the words it is never about what lies on the surface.’
Could be separated: ‘I know there is motive behind the words. It is never about what lies on the surface.’
Just simple things like that can improve the flow of the piece. But I’m no expert, and I’ve been known to play pretty fast and loose with the english language at times myself.
Having said all that, the reason I read everything you post here, and eagerly anticipate your next post, is that you’re so incredibly good at raw emotional writing. Just look at that line beginning with: ‘I fear kinship with the vampire…’
Really amazing. I can identify with this, and it gives me a powerful image.
Summing up: Well done, KarenSue. In a month’s time, when I’m telling someone about this beautiful piece of writing I found on RB, I will have forgotten all about the imperfect punctuation. It’s how it made me feel that will persist in my mind.

This is awful.

Awfully good! lol

A very dark poem that answers questions in a question. I like the description given about changing like a Chameleon, a nice comparison.

oh this is beautiful .. really deep and wonderful x

Damien, at the risk of feeding your self motivated frenzy – you appear to be an insult to everyone’s intellegence, but especially your own.

Th final lines just nail this piece beautifully for me Karen .)

my pleasure, thank you for writing it, beautiful to read x

Awesome…a favorite…oh..we all hide a little something!!!!! xoxoxo

“The world can’t know my softness it is the only thing I have left that is not tainted.” –
Looking at the multitude of responses above, it appears as though it’s a good thing that you hide your soft side from the world… I love the concept you have used behind this piece and your words paint an amazing picture of self-reflection filled with emotion.

WOW! thats Fantastic!!

some interesting analysis here.

I have to ask, are you a Scorpio by chance? This sums up very well what I’ve often felt.