What Would You Give?

anya
Author: anya
Word Count: 360
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What Would You Give?

TTST21 Silken Skin

What Would You Give? belongs to the following groups:

Twisted Tales

The mother held her child close, the new child, the youngest one, as she wandered through the close market. The noise surrounded her like waves washing, rocking back and forth.

“Lettuce, one dollar for a pound!” screamed the voices. “Hey there lovely lady, two dollars for this bag of broad beans!”

The mother smiled as she wandered, her hip jutting out with the child positioned just so. Testing the pineapple and smelling the mango. Broad beans for dinner? she thought, squeezing the old man beans in their flannelette pyjama cases.

“What wouldn’t you give…?” said a quiet murmuring voice. “What wouldn’t you give for silken skin like this?”

The woman looked up with her gentle questioning eyes towards the voice. The voice was from an older woman of indeterminate age, leaning into the baby, stroking the wrist of the mother’s child with the hands of experience. The mother smiled again, used to and expecting the compliments, settled into the reassurance of motherhood.

“Such skin, such skin,” the older woman murmured again, caressing the line where the arm of the child met the hand. No wrist as yet, just a line of yum, delectable and smooth. The child did not stir.

“But what would you give?” said the older woman again. This time she looked at the mother. “What would you give to have skin which doesn’t pucker and stretch, hands which never show the march of time with their pock marks and sag? What would you give to never see your breasts lose their shape and your hips disappear?”

The mother was intrigued. This was a question, a question bigger and brighter than any sales pitch in a chemist or at a cosmetic counter. What would she give?

The older woman opened her bag and showed the mother the container of cream – impossible youth, never grow old, stay just as you are, stay just there. The mother held the container on her hand, it was heavy and silver and shining with promise.

“What would you give?”

The mother handed over her child, and took the cream. It seemed a fair exchange.

  • lightsmith

    lightsmith

    LOLOL. A gorgeous twist indeed.

  • Matthew Dalton

    Matthew Dalton

    I should have seen it coming but I didn’t. Great read Anya.

  • Paul Rees-Jones

    Paul Rees-Jones

    Loved the flow of this piece and the twist.

  • Micky McGuinness

    Micky McGuinness

    A great tale with a lovely twist on the theme… the lure of eternal youth

  • henrybones

    henrybones

    The skin’s the thing! A well-imagined piece, with life and detail in so few words. Plus, of course, the tail.

  • jcmontgomery

    jcmontgomery

    What one would pay indeed….many things, but I never expected this. Well written as always Anya.

  • KMFalcon

    KMFalcon

    Oh what a twist..chilling. Well done.

  • Banalheed

    Banalheed

    Oh what a brutal ending…but so beautifully written.

  • yt sumner

    yt sumner

    This is one of those things I wish I had written.

  • Zolton

    Zolton

    Wonderful writing! The twist got me. Big smiles.

  • Mark Bateman

    Mark Bateman

    WOoooaoaoaaa! What a twist – and your writing leads to the final twist so beautifully..

  • Jeannette Sheehy

    Jeannette Sheehy

    Congratulations on 2nd place in the October Star Twister finals with your other piece of writing. I love the way you write! :)

  • boydhao

    boydhao

    Wow such a twist and even chilling ending…
    greatly written :)

  • nataliajoukoff

    nataliajoukoff

    Wow. The ending gave me chills for a moment and I couldn’t believe what I just read. Awesome twist!

  • TheWanderingBoo

    TheWanderingBoo

    Fantstic piece of writing…Such a brutal and chilling ending…Brilliant!!!

  • bpoetry

    bpoetry

    nice job, like the exchange, and disliked the old woman for the offering, nasty business when we think and look, and feel ourselves changing without our permission

  • mferg

    mferg

    what a price to pay for youthfulness – great read, well done!

  • anya replied

    (bowing and smiling) thank you mferg. Nice of you to say!

  • Heinz

    Heinz

    Where is this market?
    Are they open on Sundays too?

    I have enjoyed this.

  • Narcissus17

    Narcissus17

    head held high saw it coming.

  • anya replied

    sigh… oh dear Narcissus. Sorry about that. I’ll try harder next time.

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    AHHH…...the ending was so blunt. Cut the quick…....clever! Chills. You have intrigued me. Will be looking out for more. :)

  • anya replied

    Thanks Arcadia – didn’t mean for it to be quite as nasty as it seems, as I thought it was a fairly reasonable exchange…

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    NO nasty here at all…..just good writing!

  • exposedbutloved

    exposedbutloved

    wow what an end

  • NoeleneThompson

    NoeleneThompson

    Really did NOT expect that ending! Beautiful writing.

  • KarenKSmith

    KarenKSmith

    Great story!

  • anya replied

    thank you Karen. I’m really chuffed everyone thinks so

  • mistletoes

    mistletoes

    I think I knew the ending as soon as I started reading, but the horror of it still slapped me so hard I gasped. You know of course that you’ve really written an awesome metaphor for life, for the way we trade the things that really matter for “baubles, bangles, and bright shining beads”.

  • Raindrops

    Raindrops

    very macabre LOL LOL

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