“Honey?” Her dark figure filled my doorframe.
I rolled over to face the wall, my eyes shut again.
“Honey, I’m so sorry. You’ll understand one day. I had to leave.”
She had never called, never let me know she was okay, or that she missed me. She had just left. Yes, I was angry with her. Yes, I hated her right then. Yes, I missed her desperately.
“I miss you.” Her voice broke.
I squeezed my eyes more tightly shut, letting the tears come, but not allowing myself to sob or shake. I wanted to go to her, let her hold me like a child.
I needed to make her leave. I couldn’t take any more. “I hate you.” The lie I knew would hurt her.
I could hear her pain thickly coating her voice. “Happy birthday sweetie. I love you.”
Then she left again.
jennielove
wow… this is so sad, but i think the best writings are sad: there’s more emotion and people can easily relate to pain.
well written.. maybe you should try writing short stories?
andibol1010 replied
haha thank you. i’ve tried to write short stories, but i have such a hard time coming up with plots that arent cliches and tired.
jennielove
hmmm just read up on some short stories.. original ones.. like john cheever.. haha
and just.. start out with cliches anything to get your mind going
once you think of one thing thats your own and isnt overdone, work with it and more ideas will come
pay attention to the small things that most people dont notice.. i just finished reading this book in my english class “the things they carried”... pick it up and read it and you’ll understand about the small things haha
Cassidy JK (Ra...
This is really intense. I might even feel it more than it’s supposed to be felt. Excellent writing. Looks to me as though your block has subsided.
rubyjo
oh wow. a lot of emotional angst in this write, you conveyed it well.
skinnyman
Well written, well done.
lazydaze
great work!!
jim marshal
Honest, and brutal. Well written.
Kristin Reynolds
oh, this one really really hurts. wow. ouch.
well written, sad truth.
Pooh
Simple and honest and the truth, dammed good
andibol1010
thank you all so much!
skins266 28 days ago
this is so true, so many times we never get the answer or anything…and all we have to hole onto is these seemingly empty sentences, thanks for sharing…I like this alot!
BikerAngie 25 days ago
WONDERFULLY WRITTEN
Misunderstood24 8 days ago
Job well done…keep up the work. While it is saddening…it’s real. Well done =)