Just a slab
You might look at me
with your blushed pink face
Your hard pimpled complexion
But above it all I know
that your sharp edged
square attitude is all a bluff
For/Four cornered
we can all see that you really are
two faced so double the math still
just a slab
standing the test of time
waiting to be cracked through age
when your crevices may be filled
smoothed over
to tidy your appearance
and make seem renewed
a little younger cosmetically
by the touch of skilled hands
steady in their chosen profession
Yet at the end of the day
everyone knows
you are just going to get walked over
Comments
Oh my – this has a hard edge to it Anna. And yet we all know people like this – and in the end, you are right, all the pretenses and the cover ups are for nothing. We ALL get walked over at the end of it all.
I’m glad you could understand the sarcasm beyond this piece Lianne. The piece came from my husband laying a patio this weekend and my watching and thinking… I couldn’t miss such an opportunity staring me in the face! Thanks for your kindness of commenting! It’s good to know whether I’m reaching my audience or not as the case could well be!
– anaisnais
hi Anna-Marie! wow this is some piece of writing!!! bravo dear friend – well done! have missed you, hope all is well. hugs, shar xoxoxo
Thankyou for such a beautiful comment Shar, missed you too… been around a little – up and down at the moment so riding the times…;D Missed you too, have put few newer pieces up, but not been on as much to read so often, it’s trying to fit it all in when I can!
– anaisnais
kind of like a blank canvas where the paint has already been removed, like it, harsh truth, well done
Thank you so much, glad you liked! Nice to see you here…
– anaisnais
Very nice.
Appreciate your view and comment, thankyou!
– anaisnais
nice one :) i agree with Liane here … awesome writing
Thankyou Shoaib, every voice responding is clearly heard whether they oloike or not and each may influence future pieces. So glad you could take enjoyment from it.
– anaisnais
July 28,2010 Congratulations!
Oh my goodness! How pleasant a surprise to click through today and see this banner, I’m so pleased you think others might like to share it – thankyou for highlighting this poem – I appreciate all view and comments! Kindest thoughts, Anna-Marie.
– anaisnais
Your welcome Anne-Marie :o)
Really liked this calm, accepting assessment. Great use of words.
Thankyou for sharing your views/thoughts today Ian, all responses help me when making decisions and planning future works and are therefore greatly appreciated in juging public response. I hope you will be encouraged to read/comment further, thanks again!
– anaisnais
So true…each word..sure
lol. Thanks for your thoughts, most welcomed…
– anaisnais