DominicSavio

Well now,
Aren’t we just making a scene?

Painting these digital walls
With our pain,
Putting our very [personal] lives
Out on display,
Letting our emotions
Pour out onto these pages.
[As if they could ever be contained]
Though I must say,
Our attempts at keeping our feelings
Under control
Is quite amusing,
Even if it’s futile at best.
[Like a dam trying to hold back the floodgates of Heaven]
And if mere words could make the world understand
The intricacies of this love we share
I assure you, [darling]
I’d fill a thousand, thousand books
[Though it would never be enough,
There just isn’t words sufficient
In the English language
To do us justice]
But you know
[DominicSavio]
There are some who believe
That subtlety
Is a virtue.
Unfortunately
It was never one of our strengths.

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Hah.. I think we were having a contest to see who could be the least subtle.. and I think I won.

I aim to share my thoughts, feelings and experiences through the written word with anyone and everyone who is willing to listen. I have walked through the Valley of the Shadow of Death and by the grace of God I have survived to tell the tale. This is my story. I hope you enjoy it. God bless you all.

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Comments

  • S .
    S .almost 3 years ago

    brilliant … what a piece seriously.. this is very awesome
    so real and raw… GREAT work

  • Thank you so much Shoaib! =) I figured if we’re throwing subtlety out the window, why not throw it as far as we can right? I just find it interesting how people we’ve never met before have a deeper insight into our personal lives than most of the people we know! But hey, I’m not complaining! It’s a great way of venting! =) And as seemingly counter-productive as these poems are to our situation, I swear, there’s some productivity in there somewhere! Thanks a lot for the read and I’m very glad that you enjoyed it! Take care and God bless you! =)

    – AlteredMind

  • Colleen2012
    Colleen2012almost 3 years ago

    Wo, I love it!

  • Glad you enjoyed it! =) It started as a thought, turned into a laugh and became this poem. =) Haha. Have a great day! God bless you!

    – AlteredMind

  • journey360
    journey360almost 3 years ago

    very interesting; thought provoking

  • Thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed this! It’s quite an interesting situation when you put it all out on the table for the world to see. No fear, no worries, no second thoughts. What do we have to hide right? What do we have to be ashamed of? I believe, there is nothing. Thank you once again. Have a great day! God bless you!

    – AlteredMind

  • latinluvleee
    latinluvleeealmost 3 years ago

    I still love subtlety … but yes, not the strenght of many … beautiful writing.

  • Haha! Thank you for your kind words! Glad you enjoyed it! Subtlety is definitely classic and timeless. And there is something about it.. the skill it takes.. it’s almost an art in itself! =) Though when it comes to love, at least, subtlety is very much not one of my strengths. Thank you once again! Take care and God bless you!

    – AlteredMind

  • Jascie Epinn
    Jascie Epinnover 2 years ago

    Very well done

    Letting our emotions
    Pour out onto these pages.
    [As if they could ever be contained]

    I like to think they can’t but I’m negative about it

  • Glad you enjoyed it! Well, I’m sure there are those blessed with self control who can indeed contain their feelings. I however, am not one of those people. I wear my heart on my sleeve and even though there is potential for pain in such a way of life, truly, I’ve never cared. All our experiences can help us for the better. All of them. =) Thank you for the time and the thought. God bless you.

    – AlteredMind

  • Rishani Sittampalam
    Rishani Sittam...over 2 years ago

    Brilliant, just as Shoaib said, loved this.

  • Thank you so much! =) Glad you enjoyed this! Trying to contain the strongest emotion in all existence really is a futile feat. Haha. Hope you have a great day! God bless you!

    – AlteredMind

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