New Kid in Town

Author: Alison Pearce
Word Count: 157
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New Kid in Town

Theme – Western

Word Count – 150

New Kid in Town belongs to the following groups:

! Creative Writing & Poetry !, Art and Stories Made For Children, Bits and Pieces , Flash Fiction, If it doesn't belong, Twisted Tales, Who are YOU to Judge? and WMG

Tense silence shrouded the dusty road as the gunslingers faced each other. The newcomer, known only as “The Kid”, kept his focus on Earl.
Earl’s thin lips curled upwards. His hand twitched eagerly near his belt. He’d been challenged by so many, he didn’t need to concentrate.
Confident in his superior skills, Earl’s mind had already turned toward what he’d be having for lunch.
“Roast beef with a side of new kid”, he thought with a smirk.
Earl’s right hand man, Luke, began the countdown. Luke counted off the ten paces, each number yelled out after an excruciatingly long pause. Earl deftly snapped his weapon to readiness, pivoting with a grin as the final yells of “Ten!” and “Fire!” echoed around the spectators.
Earl’s smile evaporated. The new kid got the draw on him.
The new kid helped Earl to his feet, ‘Told you the Supersoaker Turbo 5000 was better.’

Janis Zroback

Ha…cute…I wonder what a Supersoaker looks like…
Alison Pearce replied

Thanks Janis. A Supersoaker is a great big multi-coloured watergun that looks a bit like a machine gun made from balloons. Well, that’s the best descrption I cann think of for it!
JRGarland

LOL! I love the twist in the story. It made me laugh. Well done.
Alison Pearce replied

Thanks JR :)
Cathryn Swanson

Super soaker’s are fun!
Well done Alison.
Alison Pearce replied

Thanks Chanelm :)
Alison Pearce replied

Chanelm?!!! Sorry Chanel!!
Lawford

Snort.
Very good Alison.
I was expecting blood.
Are you allowed to do that sort of thing these days with the water restrictions?
Alison Pearce replied

I thought spilt water would extract a much higher price than spilt blood Lawford!! Restrictions be damned!
Zolton

Great writing, Alison. ha ha… my grandpappy’s name was Earl
Alison Pearce replied

Thanks Zolton :)
KMorral

Clever twist- was looking at my soakers the other day (very apt description!) not eve sure they work! nice writing
Alison Pearce replied

Thank you :)
Rhinovangogh

I bought a supersoaker for my son when he was 7 years old. I paid for it….Great work.
Alison Pearce replied

Thank you :)