Devious
For Flash Fictions July 9th Weekend Challenge
Word Count – 150
Prompt – This was a unique prompt where we had to replace the x’s in the below paragraph to form into a story of our own. Quite a challenge!
The glass cabinet xxxxx xxxxx xxxxx green doors ajar
Xxxxxx went to the xxxxxx but xxxxxxxx
Usually xxxxx xxxxxx with coconuts xxxxx
xxxxxxxxxx xxxxxx xxxxxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx
Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx and that is why xxxxxx .
Devious belongs to the following groups:
! Creative Writing & Poetry !, Creative, Talented, and Unknown, Flash Fiction, Short stories - Spherical Scriptings and Yer pullin' my leg !The glass cabinet reflected the room’s contents like a mirror. Facing it, Rita noticed the bright green doors ajar behind her. Rita went to the front entrance and peered out, but could see nothing.
Usually by now, Rita was by the fire, daydreaming about tropical islands with coconuts full of liquid relaxation.
A soft purr drew her eyes to the mantelpiece.
“It was just you, Mr Jingles!”
Rita drew the cat into her arms and stroked him gently. Only then did it occur to Rita how bizarre it was for a cat to unlock, unbolt and open the front doors – from outside. With a smile, she remembered her ex-husbands arguments about not adopting a cat.
“They’re smart and devious. The cat would own us and that is why we’re not having one.” He had told Rita firmly.
She wondered for a moment what Mr Jingles had actually done with him.
© Alison Pearce 2009
Janis Zroback
Creepy and really effective writing Alison…
Alison Pearce replied
Thank you Janis :)
tkrosevear
If any body could produce a writing from that prompt sis, it would be you ~ perfectly ;) xoxox ♥
Alison Pearce replied
Thank you TK!!!!!
Chanel2
Evil Mr Jingles!
Well done Alison, it was indeed a challenge!
Alison Pearce replied
Thank you Chanel :)
ArcadiaTempest
Wow..not only did you work the challenge you also in a flash write had a story with intrigue and major dash of creepiness. You are so clever how you build characters in such short writes.
Alison Pearce replied
Thanks Arcadia!! I thought yours was absolutely brilliant!!
Anne van Alkemade
LOL. Cats are very useful creatures to have around!!!
Alison Pearce replied
Thanks Anne :)
Holly Ringland
ha! alison, this is brilliant – so much characterisation and placement in such a tight frame. i adore your creative take on the prompt and the black magic mr jingles.
Alison Pearce replied
Thank you so much Holly :)
Lawford
Evil Pussy.
Congrats on the win.
Alison Pearce replied
Thank you :)
Solar Zorra
Oh I LOVE this! Super-dupper Alison, congratulations on the well deserved win. :) SZ
Alison Pearce replied
Thank you Solar :)
Rhinovangogh
I hate cats, but I like tour tale. I am starting to think that men are getting the worst of your pen(only read four so far), but I delight in reading of thier humiliation and demise. Cheers, Rhino
Alison Pearce replied
Oh gosh! The poor men are a bit of a theme in my flash pieces! In my longer stories, I often write from the male perspective!
Rhinovangogh
I liked Brenbar’s Rant, an obscure pice by American novelist John Irving. It was from the femalle perspective. I have yet to try this. I should see how you handle it. Cheers, Love your stuff! Rhino
SNAPPYDAVE
ohhhhhhhhhhhh spooky stuff …. yer pullin’ my leg u left the door open when you drank from that dodgy coconut LOL
Alison Pearce replied
:)