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Prime Suspects

Cats were everywhere. Twining around each other on the floor in little cliques. More were perched on top of tables and countertops. There was even one lazily preening itself upon the fridge.
The smell that got to me first; cat litter, rotten fish and the tang of bleach used to clean up after them ineffectively. This house belonged to the cats, not the old man who harboured them.
It was all I could do not to retch right there in the dining room, and in my line of work, I’ve had occasion to smell some putrid homes.
The second was all of those green and golden eyes focused on my every move as I made my way gingerly across the room. There was the intelligence there that all cats possessed and humans could never hope to understand, but there was also distrust and loathing.
I was not welcome, invited by their host or not.
It was at that moment that the host himself came shuffling into the room.
‘Thank God you came, Detective Russell!’ Harold exclaimed, his weathered face crumpled in distress.
‘Take a deep breath and tell me what’s happened.’
‘I came home and found the victim on my back porch, Detective.’
I followed as Harold led me to the crime scene.
‘I swear it couldn’t have been my cats,’ he was saying as I looked down at the victim, horrified despite my long experience with violent death.
I shook my head. Poor dog, he’d never stood a chance.

© Alison Pearce 2008

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Written for Star Twisters Cats challenge.

Word Count – 250 exactly

Tags

fiction, cats, murder, twist, short_story, ttst10, alifiction

Logan based writer, poet and artist. I seek with the pen and the brush. I think and it rolls out into words or strokes. I believe my writing should paint a picture and that my art should tell a story. I’m an uncomplicated woman in a very complicated way.

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Comments

  • Miri
    Mirialmost 6 years ago

    nice write Alison….love the picture of all the cats sitting around watching, they are so good at that! and poor dog :-( LOL!

  • Thanks Bex! I know it’s kind of predictable but the first one I wrote ended up going over the thousand mark so it was back to the drawing board! LOL

    – Alison Pearce

  • coppertrees
    coppertreesalmost 6 years ago

    Great job Ali, I liked it!!! lol

  • Thanks Vickie!

    – Alison Pearce

  • WanderingAuthor
    WanderingAuthoralmost 6 years ago

    Despite painting the cats as villains, you managed to write a story that was amusing enough I enjoyed it. Those who know my cat-obsessed self will tell you that is no mean accomplishment. Of course, I wonder what the dog must have done to provoke them… :0 (Actually, I like dogs as well, my cats just won’t let me do much about it. :D )

  • Thanks WA! I had such trouble with this challenge. I must admit that I love cats. I love the way they own us, not the other way around, and I just went from there.

    – Alison Pearce

  • Emma Robinson
    Emma Robinsonalmost 6 years ago

    I love this Alison – I love the thoughts of them all sitting in the house plotting the demise of the cats… I have really enjoyed this challenge and how it has brought out everyone’s opinions of the small furries! I love them even more now!

  • Thanks Emma!

    – Alison Pearce

  • jomash
    jomashalmost 6 years ago

    Great discription of the cats in the poor man’s house.

  • Thank you

    – Alison Pearce

  • Micky McGuinness
    Micky McGuinnessalmost 6 years ago

    I’ve been in a quite a few houses like that, sometimes you can actually taste the smells because they are that strong, control your gag reaction is the hardest part!

    I really liked the twist, and I didn’t think it was predictable at all.
    Great read

  • Thanks Micky!

    – Alison Pearce

  • filfil
    filfilalmost 6 years ago

    the ending totally caught me off guard! I love the way you wrote this. great story!

  • Thank you!

    – Alison Pearce

  • ChainmailChick
    ChainmailChickalmost 6 years ago

    Awww, poor dog! I wasn’t expecting that, lol.

  • Thanks Gayla

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  • jcmontgomery
    jcmontgomeryalmost 6 years ago

    Well DONE!

  • Thanks JC!

    – Alison Pearce

  • Zolton
    Zoltonalmost 6 years ago

    Hee hee. Devilish story. Great imagery when reading it.

  • Thanks!

    – Alison Pearce

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