our concrete garden

Adrian Carmody
Author: Adrian Carmody
Word Count: 153
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our concrete garden

I see her in our concrete garden.

We talk and laugh as another day slips by. Her hand shakes as she grabs at the thin wisps of hair that float across her face.

We talk about nothing.

She looks back at me, her eyes tell me she is in hiding. Hiding from the cold, but in a place that brings her no comfort. She has more love in her than I will ever know… I envy it’s depth, but fear it’s blindness. How could I even breathe, if that ferocious love pulled me apart with each new heartbeat?

Her words speak of now, but her heart yearns for then… it beats for the maybe, the had been, and the could have been

We say our goodbye, and then I hold her. She disappears into my arms like a sweet afternoon dream.

I walk away, hoping that she wants to be saved

  • Luckyvegetable

    Luckyvegetable

    this is calm and loving, and makes me a bit sad, too. I love it.

  • Adrian Carmody replied

    it wasn’t what I intended to write about, but it just fell out

    I hate it when that happens!

  • Luckyvegetable

    Luckyvegetable

    really? I don’t .
    You’re outed, you big softie ;)

  • Jessica  Tremp

    Jessica Tremp

    Adrian, this is sooo beautiful and tender,
    my favourite bit is this
    ‘Her words speak of now, but her heart yearns for then… it beats for the maybe, the had been, and the could have been’
    you are one of the most gentle people i have ever come across…thank god i sneared you as a friend, lucky lucky little frog that i am

  • Adrian Carmody replied

    I feel lucky for knowing all these people that make me want to write :)

  • Caroline Gorka

    Caroline Gorka

    A beautiful piece of writing filled with sweet and heart-rending tenderness.

  • adgray

    adgray

    Gorgeous Piece Adrian
    How talented you are! :o)
    B R A V O !!

  • HeatherTS

    HeatherTS

    does anyone read pieces and hope just one person feels that way about them? this piece did that for me….how thoughtful u are….

  • Adrian Carmody replied

    That is a very sweet thing to say… thank you

    I was very, very nervous about posting this, more than normal… reactions like that make it so much easier

  • Holly Ringland

    Holly Ringland

    ‘I walk away, hoping she wants to be saved.’

    I hope she does too! What a gulf that hope is to try and cross… This is wonderful Adrian, I really love everything that can be read into it… especially how, in a few perfect words, you’ve really captured the desperation of wanting to save a beloved someone in one way or another. Beautiful.

  • Julene Mendenhall

    Julene Mendenhall

    She has more love in her than I will ever know… I envy it’s depth, but fear it’s blindness. How could I even breathe, if that ferocious love pulled me apart with each new heartbeat?

    Amazing.

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