Flash Fiction
March 2008 - 2nd Challenge
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Hi everyone. Fool |
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Here is my very first post on this forum (and this site!) Holding the nail gun made her feel powerful. Four charges of air later, her humor had improved. This was in contrast to the way she felt earlier; a fool for believing he could ever change. Completing her work, she showered with her favorite soap, the smell of which reminded her of strawberries and chocolate. How sweet those memories were, but tonight, she hoped to make them sweeter. Soon, she heard Lenny returning from the garage. Like an ungulate on concrete he clod into the room and stopped when he saw her on the couch. Seeing her there, in her newly purchased negligee, he gulped, his xenophobic face betraying his feelings. It was as if he was staring at a complete stranger. This was the probable outcome she had hoped for as she knew his night out with the boys wasn’t going to happen. Not with four flat tires. |
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My entry is Here The Impending Battle |
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Horses and nail guns – an obituary (original here Only a fool would smear their face in chocolate hoping a horse would lick it clean. If you try it –like I did- you will soon discover that tongues aren’t soap and no matter how hard you charge at water, nothing is probable with an ungulate. What is probable is that around here having an acent seems to be enough to warrant death threats and to have a nail gun pressed against your temple. The xenophobes are more prevelant than I would like – I guess that doesn’t matter now. It’s been an odd sort of day. A day to be reminded that life is not without a sense of humour and no matter how much you think otherwise, being different is dangerous. Unfortunately , I realised a little too late. I just hope someone looks after my horse. |
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Here’s my first go at this challenge! Chocolate eyes died in mine. His noble face closed, pain melting into peace. The cost of living free. He had flinched as I cleaned his wounds. I smiled at that. My big brave boy shying away from soap sting. I traced the hole behind his ear. Small and dark with evil buried deep. Possessing the blackest of humour, it was probable that they meant this as a joke. The final insult to my beloved. No finely crafted sword or quiver of plush arrows for him. No, a common tool, a nail gun. I had been a fool. As one of them, I thought they’d leave us be, hadn’t realised how xenophobic they were. Angry, I raised a fist to the sky and vowed revenge on my fellow Gods. For my love, my hope, my centaur. |
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Trying to get back into writing…...:) Julia It is afternoon, dark, with thickening rain that charges and speaks of storms. I stand dreaming through the water while he, the fool, lounges in a sofa I hope swallows him up and traps him there, between velour and wood and the smell of still-smoking nail guns. Those stubby, touch-worn fingers, reddening face. Hair the colour of bitter chocolate, dry and soap-smelling. >Ungulate. he reads loudly to the back of my head >Un-gu-late. Bet you don’t know what that means I am absently reminded of the cowboy films we used to watch, the black and white trot of laden-down horse and cigarillo chewing owner. The kitsch saloon whores pouting dusty lips in seduction dance, make-up smothering humour dipped lines. He is thumbing through the X’s. I expect Xylophone, Xenophobic. Xanthippe. As I walk out into the glorious rain, he is still shouting words into the smirk of empty room. |
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The upstairs neighbour always wore heels indoors. She’d come home late and clatter through the flat. Downstairs in bed, we’d track her movements. The fool always used words no-one understood. He did it with dry humour, sparing a thought for unused words. But then it wasn’t funny anymore. Nothing says serious like a nail gun to the head of a neighbour. He was still wearing his half smile when he used the word xenophobic in the interview. When he thought he could fight the charges. Before 25 years to life loomed ahead of him. Ahead of me. But words went toward probable cause. And his smiles were disavowed. I bring him some chocolate when I visit each month. I give him smiles of my own. I always wear flats. |
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The Game I remember his profile but not his face. We sat in the garden – he, smelling of dark chocolate and sandalwood soap, me with the Book in my lap, thumbing pages worn with use, searching for the one. |
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Assumptions and Revenge John’s face was twisted with rage; spit foamed like soap at the corners of his mouth. ‘You xenophobic bastard. You were let off on all charges because you bribed someone, didn’t you? You don’t fool me!’ The subject of John’s wrath could only gasp pitifully, due to the hands gripping his throat. ‘You think it’s humour, huh? The most probable result from your stupidity was never going to be good.’ He paused, and his brow furrowed. ‘It wasn’t an accident was it?’ he whispered. ‘You didn’t like his chocolate-brown skin, so you came after him with a nail gun.’ A few nearby horses were the only witnesses, and like most ungulates, they didn’t even glance up from their eating. |
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Wow, what an absolutely stunning collection. The judges are having a tough time picking a winner but I promise we’ll get back to you very very soon. In the meantime, the first April Challenge is now posted. Good luck all. And don’t forget to check out the best of the best, the winning entries of each challenge, in the Flash Fiction Blog (and please do leave your comments). |
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And the winner is … First: Jcmontgomery with “Home Schooled” Closely followed by Danpatmore and Damian. Well done everyone. |
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Wow!! I am stunned. Thank you so much to everyone. I didn’t envy the judges at all as I agree with Anne…this was an ‘absolutely stunning collection’. And, from what I have seen so far in the April Challenge, another difficult choice lays ahead. I feel so lucky to be part of such a wonderfully supportive and talented group!! And thank you for the recognition. |
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Cool work JC! |
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It was a great challenge and has seemingly bought out the best in us all, I wonder what April holds in store! |
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I remember back in Grade School, Jimmy Nailor, was the toughest kid in class. Unfortunately, he was also the meanest. His nickname was “Nail Gun”. Everyone seemed to think it was just a play on his last name. Although, several small, round scars on his cousin Earl’s face seemed like a probable origin to me. He was absolutely the most xenophopic bigot I had ever met and possessed absolutely no sense of humor. Back in Grade two, Tommy Wong, once asked him for directions to the restroom. Jimmy didn’t like his accent and dragged him to the boys’ where he forced Tommy to eat soap. The one saving grace with Jimmy is that he wore clickers on his cowboy boots so you could hear the snick, snick of his ungulate steps coming down the hallway and, most times, could run for cover. Jimmy’s favourite pass-time was beating kids up for their lunch money and snacks. He loved to say, “A fool and his chocolate are soon parted”. I would be amazed if Jimmy was never brought up on charges. |
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Sorry, I didn’t make the cut. I was sick. Perhaps I’ll try for April’s Challenge. |